Talk:SR V class
Latest comment: 17 years ago by The Rambling Man in topic GA review comments
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Day Out with Thomas
Since the SR V Class survived into preservation, can one Class disguise as Vernon for Day out with Thomas? Felix 20:28, 18 July 2006
GA review comments
So far, it's not quite there, here's the checklist with my comments following:
- It is reasonably well written.
- a (prose): b (MoS):
- It is factually accurate and verifiable.
- a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
- It is broad in its coverage.
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- It follows the neutral point of view policy.
- a (fair representation): b (all significant views):
- It is stable.
- It contains images, where possible, to illustrate the topic.
- a (tagged and captioned): b (lack of images does not in itself exclude GA): c (non-free images have fair use rationales):
- Overall:
- a Pass/Fail:
Specific comments:
- The lead describs the locomotive as being "... regarded as the most powerful class ...". This is not mentioned in the article, and WP:LEAD suggests that "Significant information should not appear in the lead if it is not covered in the remainder of the article."
- Some issues with the prose, I've fixed a couple of things, but here are a couple more points:
- " ...saved from the cutter's torch... " - not particularly neutrally phrased.
- "The locomotives were designed by Richard Maunsell, and was heavily influenced ..." needs fixing.
- "...outshopped ..." - still not clear to the non-expert reader what this means.
More to follow but I'm putting the review on hold in the meantime. The Rambling Man 07:32, 18 July 2007 (UTC)
- "Livery and numbering" section contain four short paragraphs, could be made into two longer paragraphs quite easily which would improve the prose.
- "Remaining artefacts of other class members" should either be a section heading or made into prose to introduce the list.
- Perhaps expand NYMR before using it the first time.
- "uppingham" should be "Uppingham" no doubt.
That's all I have right now. Let me know if you'd like to re-review in the future. The Rambling Man 09:17, 18 July 2007 (UTC)
- Thanks for dealing with my issues so expediently, I'm promoting to GA now. The Rambling Man 16:53, 18 July 2007 (UTC)