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Reviewer: WikiOriginal-9 (talk · contribs) 16:57, 19 October 2023 (UTC)[reply]

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (No original research): d (copyvio and plagiarism):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/Fail:

Notes

I changed the weight in the infobox from 210 to 212 to match PFA and PFR
"letter-of-intent" link to National Letter of Intent
- Done.
"Oilers' coach" add head coach
- Done.
"He survived the final roster cuts on September 7.[16] He made his NFL" Suggest merging these sentences to "roster cuts on September 7, and made his NFL debut"
- Done.
Anything else on his life after football?
- Added a little bit.
  - That first source said he lives in Longview. WikiOriginal-9 (talk) 07:40, 22 October 2023 (UTC)[reply]
    - @WikiOriginal-9: Does my change work (Valentine returned to East Texas, where he grew up, after his football career ended and worked at a forging plant)? BeanieFan11 (talk) 19:30, 22 October 2023 (UTC)[reply]
I added an image

That's all I think. WikiOriginal-9 (talk) 17:05, 19 October 2023 (UTC)[reply]

@WikiOriginal-9: BeanieFan11 (talk) 23:40, 21 October 2023 (UTC)[reply]

All points have been addressed. Passing the article. Nice work! WikiOriginal-9 (talk) 19:38, 22 October 2023 (UTC)[reply]

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 #It is '''reasonably well written'''.
-#:a ''(prose, spelling, and grammar)'': {{GAList/check|}} b ''([[Wikipedia:Manual of Style|MoS]] for [[Wikipedia:Manual of Style/Lead section|lead]], [[Wikipedia:Manual of Style/Layout|layout]], [[Wikipedia:Manual of Style/Words to watch|word choice]], [[Wikipedia:Manual of Style/Writing about fiction|fiction]], and [[Wikipedia:Manual of Style/Embedded lists|lists]])'': {{GAList/check|yes}}
+#:a ''(prose, spelling, and grammar)'': {{GAList/check|yes}} b ''([[Wikipedia:Manual of Style|MoS]] for [[Wikipedia:Manual of Style/Lead section|lead]], [[Wikipedia:Manual of Style/Layout|layout]], [[Wikipedia:Manual of Style/Words to watch|word choice]], [[Wikipedia:Manual of Style/Writing about fiction|fiction]], and [[Wikipedia:Manual of Style/Embedded lists|lists]])'': {{GAList/check|yes}}
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 #It is '''factually accurate''' and '''[[Wikipedia:Verifiability|verifiable]]'''.
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 #It is '''broad in its coverage'''.
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+#:a ''([[WP:Out of scope|major aspects]])'': {{GAList/check|yes}} b ''([[Wikipedia:Article size|focused]])'': {{GAList/check|yes}}
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 ===Notes===
-*I changed the weight in the infobox from 210to 212 to match PFA and PFR
+*I changed the weight in the infobox from 210 to 212 to match PFA and PFR
 *"letter-of-intent" link to [[National Letter of Intent]]
+** Done.
 *"Oilers' coach" add head coach
+** Done.
 *"He survived the final roster cuts on September 7.[16] He made his NFL" Suggest merging these sentences to "roster cuts on September 7, and made his NFL debut"
+** Done.
 *Anything else on his life after football?
+** Added a little bit.
+***That first source said he lives in Longview. [[User:WikiOriginal-9|WikiOriginal-9]] ([[User talk:WikiOriginal-9|talk]]) 07:40, 22 October 2023 (UTC)
+**** {{ping|WikiOriginal-9}} Does my change work ({{tq|Valentine returned to East Texas, where he grew up, after his football career ended and worked at a forging plant}})? [[User:BeanieFan11|BeanieFan11]] ([[User talk:BeanieFan11|talk]]) 19:30, 22 October 2023 (UTC)
+*I added an image
 That's all I think. [[User:WikiOriginal-9|WikiOriginal-9]] ([[User talk:WikiOriginal-9|talk]]) 17:05, 19 October 2023 (UTC)
+* {{ping|WikiOriginal-9}} [[User:BeanieFan11|BeanieFan11]] ([[User talk:BeanieFan11|talk]]) 23:40, 21 October 2023 (UTC)
+All points have been addressed. Passing the article. Nice work! [[User:WikiOriginal-9|WikiOriginal-9]] ([[User talk:WikiOriginal-9|talk]]) 19:38, 22 October 2023 (UTC)