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    Painting and drawing classes are currently optional courses in most schools. However, some argue they should be compulsory as they provide benefits to students. While art can improve creativity and help relax, making it compulsory may burden students who already have a heavy course load. It is also important to consider students' individual interests. Therefore, while art is valuable, painting and drawing should remain optional courses rather than becoming compulsory.

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    Painting and drawing classes are currently optional courses in most schools. However, some argue they should be compulsory as they provide benefits to students. While art can improve creativity and help relax, making it compulsory may burden students who already have a heavy course load. It is also important to consider students' individual interests. Therefore, while art is valuable, painting and drawing should remain optional courses rather than becoming compulsory.

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    Painting and drawing classes are currently optional courses in most schools. However, some argue they should be compulsory as they provide benefits to students. While art can improve creativity and help relax, making it compulsory may burden students who already have a heavy course load. It is also important to consider students' individual interests. Therefore, while art is valuable, painting and drawing should remain optional courses rather than becoming compulsory.

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    Question: some people think painting anddrawing are as important as other subjects, they should be compulsory in highschool education, to what
    extent do you agree or disagree?

    In most schools, painting and drawingclasses are regarded as optional courses. However, some people believe
    thatthese courses play an important role in curriculum. Personally, I am convincedthat other courses are more vital
    than painting and drawing classes.
    Undeniably, learning how to draw a picturecan improve students sense of arts. It is worth noting that painting is a
    goodhabit for students under high pressure on their study. For instance, afterfinishing a large amount of homework,
    drawing a simple picture makes it easyfor students to relax so as to releasing their pressure. Hence, setting uppainting
    and drawing as compulsory courses in the school seems like a wisedecision.
    On the other hand, students already have alarge number of compulsory courses and many tests in the school, adding
    to anothercourse will increase their burden on study. In other words, although paintingcan cultivate students sense of
    study, it is important for students to getenough rest time, which is benefit to growing up. Thus, schools can
    encouragestudents to do more exercise or have a rest rather than enforce them to attendother courses like art.
    Furthermore, students have their own right to choosewhether attending painting and drawing courses according to their
    interests. Thereis no doubt that interest is benefit to boost ones study efficiency. This isparticular for students who
    dislike painting will believe that learningpainting just waste their time.
    In conclusion, I suppose that painting anddrawing courses cannot become compulsory courses, it is not only because of
    theheavy study works students already have but also because of students interestsand hobbies.

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