The Personal Statement

The ideal student, seen through the eyes of

graduate faculty, is gifted and creative, very
bright and extremely motivated to learn,
perfectly suited to the program, eager to
actively pursue the lines of inquiry valued by
the faculty, pleasant, responsible, and devoid
of serious personal problems.
The statement is a professional essay that should outline your
1) previous research experiences, 2) research interests,
3) relevant experience, and 4) career goals.
 Are there any gaps/discrepancies in your academic record you should
explain (e.g., great grades but mediocre GRE scores)?
Have you had to overcome any unusual obstacles (e.g., economic,
familial, physical) in your life?
What personal characteristics (integrity, compassion, persistence)
and skills (leadership, communicative, analytical) do you possess that
would improve your prospects for success in the field? Is there a way
to document that you have these characteristics?
Why might you be a stronger candidate for graduate schooland
more successful and effective in the profession or field than other
applicants?
What are the most compelling reasons you can give for the
admissions committee to be interested in you?
 What's special, distinctive, and/or impressive about your life story?
What details of your life (people or events that have shaped your
goals) might help the committee better understand you or help set
you apart from other applicants?
When did you become interested in psychology? What have you
learned about it & yourself that has further stimulated your interest
& reinforced your conviction that you are well suited to the field?
How have you learned about the field (e.g., classes, readings,
seminars, work or other experiences)?
If you have worked a lot during college, what have you learned (e.g.,
leadership or managerial skills), and how has that work contributed
to your growth?
What are your career goals?
 Tell a story
Think in terms of demonstrating through concrete experience. Dont be
boring; make your statement fresh, different, & memorable.
Be direct
Answer each question asked & be sure your answer fits the question asked.
Be specific
Your desire to become a psychologist should be the logical result of specific
experience described in your statement. Your application should emerge as
the logical conclusion to your story.
Find an angle/hook
If you're like most people, your life story lacks drama, so figuring out a way
to make it interesting becomes the big challenge. Finding a "hook" is vital.
Concentrate on your opening paragraph
The opening paragraph is generally the most important. It is here that you
grab the reader's attention or lose it. This paragraph is the framework for
the rest of the statement.
 Tell what you know
The middle section of your statement might detail your knowledge of and
experience in psychology. Be as specific as you can in relating what you know
about the field. Refer to research experiences, classes, seminars you've attended,
or any other source of specific information about the career you want and why
you're suited to it.
Don't include some subjects
references to high school accomplishments & potentially controversial subjects
(e.g., religion, politics). Think of it as a professional, not personal, statement.
Avoid clichs
An applicant who writes that s/he wants to help other people is not exactly
expressing an original thought. Stay away from such tired statements.
Write well and correctly
Be meticulous. Proofread carefully. Express yourself clearly and concisely. Adhere
to stated word limits. Avoid slang words that make you sound uneducated, &
overly elaborate words that make you appear pretentious.
 Tailor your statement to the program so the admissions committee is
convinced you belong.
Write a rough draft; set it aside; read it a week later.
If it still sounds good, move ahead. If not, rewrite it until it sounds right.
Ask two instructors for feedback on your rough draft.
Include these comments into your 2nd draft.
Ask for another reading and comments, and then prepare your final statement.
Keep it brief !
Stick to the points requested by the program, avoid lengthy personal or philosophical
discussions, do not be redundant or wordy.
Do not feel bad if you have little experience in psychology to write about; no
one who is about to graduate from college does!
Explain your relevant experiences (e.g., practicum, research projects), but do not try to turn
them into events of cosmic proportion. Be honest, sincere, and objective as this conveys you
have a mature and realistic perspective.
 88 Chairs of Graduate Admissions Committees
of Psychology graduate programs provided
one or two examples of kisses of death you have
encountered during your career
Kisses of death were defined as aberrant types of
information that cause graduate admissions
committees to reject otherwise strong applicants
 Damaging personal statements

Harmful letters of recommendation

Lack of program information

Poor writing skills

Misfired attempts to impress

 Personal Mental Health
Discussions of a personal mental health problem will
likely DECREASE your chances of acceptance.
Such statements may create the impression you are
unable to function as a successful graduate student.
Committees commented that an applicant showed evidence
of untreated mental illness, emotional instability, or was
seeking graduate training to better understand ones own
problems or problems in ones family
Graduate school is an academic path, NOT an
intervention for personal problems!
 Excessive Altruism
Admissions committees are NOT impressed by
statements such as I want to help all people, or I think
I am a strong candidate for your program because people
have always come to me with their problems; Im viewed
as a warm, empathetic, and caring person.
These statements could be interpreted to mean you
believe a strong need to help others is more important
to your success in graduate school than a desire to
perform research & engage in professional activities.
Let your letters of recommendation comment on your
personal qualities!
 Excessive Self-Disclosure
Avoid a long saga about how [you] finished
[school] over incredible odds
Have a letter of recommendation allude to this!
Avoid statements that you want to pursue a career
in clinical psychology because of a personal family
experience with psychopathology
Faculty may interpret such information as a sign you are
unaware of the value of interpersonal or professional
boundaries in sensitive areas.
 Professionally Inappropriate
Avoid inappropriate humor, attempts to appear
cute or clever, and references to God or religious
issues when these issues are unrelated to the
program to which you are applying (e.g., God has
given me natural talents that make me a very good clinician).
This type of information could be taken to mean you
lack awareness of the formal nature of the application
process or the culture of graduate school.
 Avoid attempts to impress the members of a graduate admissions
committee with information they may interpret as insincere flattery
(e.g., referring to the target program in an excessively complimentary
manner) or inappropriate (e.g., namedropping or blaming others for
poor academic performance).
Graduate admissions committees are composed of intelligent people; do not use
your application as an opportunity to insult their intelligence.
Avoid statements that reflect a generic approach to the application
process or an unfamiliarity with the program to which you are applying.
These statements signal you have not made an honest effort to learn about the
program from which you are saying you want to earn your graduate degree.
Avoid statements that indicate you and the target program are a perfect
fit if these statements are not corroborated with specific evidence that
supports your assertion (e.g., your research interests are similar to those
of the program's faculty).
Graduate faculty can interpret a lack of this evidence as a sign that you and the
program to which you are applying are not a good match.
 Avoid spelling or grammatical errors in your application.
Such errors are an unmistakable warning of substandard writing skills, a refusal to
proofread your work, or your willingness to submit careless written work.
Avoid writing in an unclear, disorganized, or unconvincing manner that
does not provide your readers with a coherent picture of your research,
educational, and professional goals.
A crucial part of your graduate training will be writing; do not communicate your
inability to write to those you hope will be evaluating your writing in the future.
Do not use boring intros or conclusions
"Allow me to introduce myself. My name is..."
"This question asks me to discuss..."
"I would like to thank the admissions committee for considering my application."
"It is my sincere hope that you will grant me the opportunity to attend your fine school."
"In sum, there are three reasons why you should admit me...

Appleby, D. C., & Appleby, K. M. (2006). Kisses of death in the graduate school application
process. Teaching of Psychology, 33(6), 19-24.