Grade 11 Module 4 Unit 1 Lesson 6
Grade 11 Module 4 Unit 1 Lesson 6
Grade 11 Module 4 Unit 1 Lesson 6
11.4.1 Lesson 6
Introduction
In this lesson, students are introduced to writing substandard W.11-12.3.a, which requires students to
create an engaging narrative introduction that orients the reader to a problem, situation, or observation
and its significance; establish point of view; introduce characters or a narrator; and create a smooth
progression of experiences or events. This is the first of several lessons in the module that include
targeted writing instruction on W.11-12.3. Students review “On the Rainy River” from The Things They
Carried to determine and analyze how Tim O’Brien constructs an engaging narrative introduction that
orients the reader to a problem, situation, or observation.
Student learning is assessed via an Exit Slip. Students write 2–3 sentences in response to the following
prompt: Propose an idea for a new introduction to “On the Rainy River” and explain how the idea
engages and orients the reader to the narrator’s problem or situation and its significance.
For homework, students draft a text-based narrative writing piece, incorporating the skills of W.11-
12.3.a, in preparation for peer review and revision in the following lesson.
Standards
Assessed Standard(s)
W.11-12.4 Produce clear and coherent writing in which the development, organization, and style
are appropriate to task, purpose, and audience.
Addressed Standard(s)
W.11-12.3.a Write narratives to develop real or imagined experiences or events using effective
technique, well-chosen details, and well-structured event sequences.
a. Engage and orient the reader by setting out a problem, situation, or observation and
its significance, establishing one or multiple point(s) of view, and introducing a
narrator and/or characters; create a smooth progression of experiences or events.
Assessment
Assessment(s)
Student learning is assessed via an Exit Slip. Students write 2–3 sentences in response to the following
prompt:
Propose an idea for a new introduction to “On the Rainy River” and explain how the idea engages
and orients the reader to the narrator’s problem or situation and its significance.
Consider using the W.11-12.3.a portion of the 11.4 Narrative Writing Rubric and Checklist to guide
the assessment.
High Performance Response(s)
A High Performance Response should:
Propose a new introduction for “On the Rainy River” (e.g., Introduce the story from the moment
the narrator receives the draft notice rather than with the narrator’s reflection on why he is telling
the story.).
Explain how this idea engages and orients the reader to the narrator’s problem or situation and its
significance (e.g., Readers are unaware of the narrator’s explicit conflict until he says “In June of
1968, a month after graduating from Macalester College, I was drafted to fight a war I hated” (p.
38). If the story started with the draft notice, the narrator’s reflections could be moved elsewhere
in the story (e.g., before the narrator writes the note to his parents) or discarded. With this
change, readers would not be aware of or understand that the story is difficult for the narrator,
because they would not have read his confession that “[t]his is one story I’ve never told before” (p.
37). This change to the beginning of the story would introduce “the moral split” earlier, and would
allow for later portions of the text to develop the more complicated aspects of the narrator’s
internal conflict (p. 42).).
Vocabulary
Vocabulary to provide directly (will not include extended instruction)
None.*
Vocabulary to teach (may include direct word work and/or questions)
None.*
Lesson Agenda/Overview
Student-Facing Agenda % of Lesson
Standards & Text:
Standards: W.11-12.4, W.11-12.3.a
Text: “On the Rainy River” from The Things They Carried by Tim O’Brien
Learning Sequence:
1. Introduction of Lesson Agenda 1. 10%
2. Homework Accountability 2. 10%
3. Writing Instruction: Narrative Introductions 3. 25%
4. Narrative Writing: Brainstorming and Prewriting 4. 20%
5. Lesson Assessment: Exit Slip 5. 10%
6. Narrative Writing: Drafting 6. 20%
7. Closing 7. 5%
Materials
Copies of the 11.4 Common Core Learning Standards Tool for each student
Copies of the 11.4 Narrative Writing Rubric and Checklist for each student
Learning Sequence
How to Use the Learning Sequence
Symbo Type of Text & Interpretation of the Symbol
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Plain text indicates teacher action.
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Bold text indicates questions for the teacher to ask students.
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Italicized text indicates a vocabulary word.
Indicates student action(s).
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Indicates instructional notes for the teacher.
Distribute the 11.4 Common Core Learning Standards Tool. Inform students that in this lesson they
begin to work with new narrative writing standards: W.11-12.3 and W.11-12.3.a. Instruct students to
individually read the standards on their tools and assess their familiarity with and mastery of them.
Students read and assess their familiarity with standards W.11-12.3 and W.11-12.3.a.
Instruct students to talk in pairs about what they think the standard and substandard mean. Lead a brief
discussion about these standards.
How does the standard suggest students should develop their narratives?
Student responses should include:
o The standard requires students to use effective techniques or writing skills and components.
o The standard requires students to include well-chosen details that develop the story.
o The standard requires students to order story events in an effective way.
Instruct students to focus on W.11-12.3.a and talk in pairs about what they think this standard means.
Lead a brief discussion about the standard. Remind students to pay attention to the overarching
standard W.11-12.3 as well as W.11-12.3.a.
Explain to students they will discuss and practice W.11-12.3.a in today’s lesson.
Students (or student pairs) discuss and share how they applied a focus standard to their AIR
texts from the previous lesson’s homework.
Inform students that the 11.4 Narrative Writing Rubric and Checklist is a resource to which they will
refer to as they engage in the writing process throughout this module.
Differentiation Consideration: Consider reviewing the rubric with students. Explain to students that
the first four pages of the handout are comprised of the 11.4 Narrative Writing Rubric, which details
four categories of assessed standards, a brief synthesis of what those categories entail, and a list of
the standards contained in that category. Corresponding to each standard category are four levels of
potential student response. The final page of the handout is a student checklist that corresponds
with the rubric.
Students follow along and review the 11.4 Narrative Writing Rubric and Checklist.
Inform students that throughout the module they will learn how to write narrative texts to develop real
or imagined experiences or events using effective technique, well-chosen details, and well-structured
event sequences. Explain to students that while narrative writing allows students the opportunity to be
creative, open-minded, and experimental in what they choose to write, it still requires a process, or a
series of steps, to develop a clear and cohesive text. Explain that in this module, students have
opportunities to develop text-based narrative writing based on specific writing substandards; they also
have the opportunity to revise, expand, edit, and publish their narratives. Explain to students that the
module texts serve as examples of effective narrative writing techniques.
Students listen.
Consider informing students that for their 11.4.1 End-of-Unit Assessment Part 2, they will
brainstorm, prewrite, draft, peer review, revise, edit, and publish a narrative writing piece.
Instruct students to examine the W.11-12.3.a portion of the 11.4 Narrative Writing Rubric and Checklist.
Students focus on the skills outlined in W.11-12.3.a in the writing instruction that follows.
Students examine substandard W.11-12.3.a on the 11.4 Narrative Writing Rubric and Checklist.
How does this standard suggest effectively engaging and orienting the reader?
Student responses should include:
o By getting the reader’s attention at the beginning of the story and identifying a situation or
problem that engrosses the reader in the story
o By establishing at least one point of view
o By introducing a narrator or character(s)
o By writing about the events or experiences at the beginning of the story in a smooth and
clear way
Instruct students to take out their copies of “On the Rainy River” by Tim O’Brien. Explain that “On the
Rainy River” serves as an exemplar to provide students with examples of each of the elements of W.11-
12.3.a: a problem, situation, or observation and its significance; one or more points of view; a narrator
and/or characters; and a smooth progression of experiences and events.
Differentiation Consideration: Consider using a different model text to serve as an exemplar for
these narrative techniques depending on student needs.
For the text examples below, ask students to discuss in pairs the following question:
After each example, engage students in a discussion about how the example conforms to the criteria of
W.11-12.3.a.
Example 1: “This is one story I’ve never told before” (p. 37).
Example 2: “For more than twenty years I’ve had to live with it, feeling the shame, trying to push it
away, and so by this act of remembrance, by putting facts down on paper, I’m hoping to relieve at least
some of the pressure on my dreams” (p. 37).
Ask students to keep these examples in mind as they develop their own narrative writing pieces
according to the criteria of W.11-12.3.a, both in class and for homework in the following activities.
Students listen.
Consider focusing the narrative writing instruction on personal narrative to prepare students for the
Common Application essay prompts. Students may choose from any of the 2014–2015 Common
Application essay prompts:
o Some students have a background or story that is so central to their identity that they believe
their application would be incomplete without it. If this sounds like you, then please share your
story.
o Recount an incident or time when you experienced failure. How did it affect you, and what
lessons did you learn?
o Reflect on a time when you challenged a belief or idea. What prompted you to act? Would you
make the same decision again?
o Describe a place or environment where you are perfectly content. What do you do or
experience there, and why is it meaningful to you?
o Discuss an accomplishment or event, formal or informal, that marked your transition from
childhood to adulthood within your culture, community, or family.
Unit 12.1.3 in Module 12.1 is devoted to instruction on crafting a personal narrative in preparation
for the college application essay prompts. Consider referencing or implementing Unit 12.1.3 as an
alternative to 11.4.1 Lessons 6, 7, 11, 12, 14, 15, 16 and 11.4.2 Lessons 3, 4, 11, 12, 19, 20.
Draft a new introduction to “On the Rainy River” that engages and orients the reader to the problem
or situation and its significance. Establish a point of view, a narrator, and/or characters, and create a
smooth progression of experiences or events.
Students read the prompt and follow along.
Instruct student groups to come up with 3–4 different ideas for a narrative writing piece. These ideas
should reflect different ways to engage and orient the reader by setting out a problem, situation, or
observation and its significance, establishing one or multiple point(s) of view, introducing a narrator
and/or characters, and creating a smooth progression of experiences or events. Remind students to
write notes during their discussion, as their discussion will contribute to the assessment: an articulation
of their plan for the narrative writing piece. Remind students to refer to W.11-12.3.a on the 11.4
Narrative Writing Rubric and Checklist to guide their discussion.
Student groups discuss and brainstorm ideas for a narrative writing piece, using the prompt
above.
Student responses may include:
o Introduce the story from the moment the narrator receives the draft notice rather than with
the narrator’s reflection on why he is telling the story. Readers are unaware of the
narrator’s explicit conflict until he says “In June of 1968, a month after graduating from
Macalester College, I was drafted to fight a war I hated” (p. 38). If the story started with the
draft notice, the narrator’s reflections could be moved elsewhere in the story (e.g., before
the narrator writes the note to his parents) or discarded. With this change, readers would
not be aware of or understand that the story is difficult for the narrator, because they would
not have read his confession that “[t]his is one story I’ve never told before” (p. 37). This
change to the beginning of the story would introduce “the moral split” earlier, and would
allow for later portions of the text to develop the more complicated aspects of the
narrator’s internal conflict (p. 42).
o Introduce the story from another point of view or even multiple points of view, so readers
would benefit from getting an outsider’s impression of the narrator. It would be interesting
to start the story from the Tip Top Lodge, with Elroy’s description of the narrator who shows
up unannounced. This would provide an opportunity to write a physical description about
the narrator, similar to the physical description of Elroy as “eighty-one years old, skinny and
shrunken and mostly bald” (p. 46).
o Introduce the story with third person narration. This would engage and orient the reader by
using an objective tone, and it might contribute to a deeper understanding of the opinions
and actions of the narrator, as well as those with whom he interacts (e.g., Elroy or the
narrator’s parents). The narrator’s decision making is greatly influenced by the opinions he
assumes others have of him as a “Traitor!” or “Turncoat!” but third person narration would
allow opportunities to see where different characters’ thoughts and opinions overlap and
diverge with the narrator’s internal thoughts (p. 57).
o Introduce the story from the section where the narrator describes “working in an Armour
meatpacking plant” (p. 40). The backdrop of the meatpacking plant includes physical
carnage and gore, but it also represents an emotional space for the narrator to think about
his options. The setting of the meatpacking plant also aligns with the narrator’s description
of “a physical rupture—a cracking-leaking-popping feeling” that ultimately forces him to
make a major decision in the story (p. 44). This would be an engaging introduction because
it means the first decision the narrator makes in the story is to flee or take action regarding
his conflict, rather than beginning his story with an explanation of his “confession” (p. 37).
Propose an idea for a new introduction to “On the Rainy River” and explain how the idea engages and
orients the reader to the narrator’s problem or situation and its significance.
Explain to students that this Exit Slip will serve as the foundation for the narrative writing piece they
begin to draft during the following activity.
Draft a new introduction to “On the Rainy River” that engages and orients the reader to the problem
or situation and its significance. Establish a point of view, a narrator, and/or characters, and create a
smooth progression of experiences or events.
Instruct students to incorporate the skills outlined in W.11-12.3.a as they draft their narrative writing
pieces. Remind students to refer to the relevant portions of the 11.4 Narrative Writing Rubric and
Checklist and their notes from the prewriting and brainstorming activity as they work on their narrative
writing pieces.
Explain to students that they will have opportunities to revise their narrative writing in the following
lesson.
The process of writing narrative involves drafting, peer review, editing, and revising. If access to
technology is available, consider using a cloud or electronic storage system (Microsoft Word, Google
Drive, etc.) that allows each student to write and track changes using a word-processing program. If
technological resources are not available, use the established classroom protocols for drafting,
editing, and revising hard copies.
Differentiation Consideration: Consider instructing students to briefly research public opinion about
the Vietnam War to support them as they craft new introductions to “On the Rainy River.”
Students independently draft their narrative writing.
Activity 7: Closing 5%
Display and distribute the homework assignment. For homework, instruct students to continue to draft
their text-based narrative writing pieces in response to the following prompt:
Draft a new introduction to “On the Rainy River” that engages and orients the reader to the problem
or situation and its significance. Establish a point of view, a narrator and/or characters and create a
smooth progression of experiences or events.
Instruct students to come to class prepared for peer review and revision in the following lesson. Remind
students to refer to the W.11-12.3.a portion of the 11.4 Narrative Writing Rubric and Checklist and notes
from the brainstorming and prewriting discussion as they draft their narrative pieces.
Students follow along.
Homework
Continue to draft your text-based narrative writing piece in response to the following prompt:
Draft a new introduction to “On the Rainy River” that engages and orients the reader to the problem
or situation and its significance. Establish a point of view, a narrator and/or characters, and create a
smooth progression of experiences or events.
Refer to the W.11-12.3.a portion of the 11.4 Narrative Writing Rubric and Checklist and notes from the
brainstorming and prewriting discussion as you draft your narrative piece. Come to class prepared to
participate in peer review and revision of your narrative piece.
CCS Standards: Writing I know what this is asking This standard has familiar I am not familiar with this
and I can do this. language, but I haven’t standard.
mastered it.
CCS Standards: Writing I know what this is asking This standard has familiar I am not familiar with this
and I can do this. language, but I haven’t standard.
mastered it.
CCS Standards: Writing I know what this is asking This standard has familiar I am not familiar with this
and I can do this. language, but I haven’t standard.
mastered it.
Coherence, Organization, and Skillfully engage and orient the reader Engage and orient the reader by Somewhat effectively engage or orient Ineffectively engage or orient the
Style by thoroughly and clearly setting out a setting out a problem, situation, or the reader by partially setting out a reader by insufficiently setting out a
The extent to which the response problem, situation, or observation and observation and its significance, problem, situation, or observation and problem, situation, or observation and
engages and orients the reader by its significance, establishing one or establishing one or multiple point(s) of its significance, establishing one or its significance, establishing one or
setting out a problem, situation, multiple point(s) of view, and view, and introducing a narrator multiple point(s) of view, and multiple point(s) of view, and
or observation and its significance, introducing a narrator and/or and/or characters; create a smooth introducing a narrator and/or introducing a narrator and/or
establishing one or multiple characters; skillfully create a smooth progression of experiences or events. characters; create an unclear characters; create a disorganized
point(s) of view, and introducing a progression of experiences or events. (W.11-12.3.a) progression of experiences or events. collection of experiences or events.
narrator and/or characters; and (W.11-12.3.a) (W.11-12.3.a) (W.11-12.3.a)
Use narrative techniques such as
creates a smooth progression of Skillfully use narrative techniques such dialogue, pacing, description, Somewhat effectively use narrative Ineffectively or rarely use narrative
experiences or events. as dialogue, pacing, description, reflection, and multiple plot lines, techniques such as dialogue, pacing, techniques such as dialogue, pacing,
CCSS.ELA-Literacy.W.11-12.3 reflection, and multiple plot lines, developing experiences, events, description, reflection, and multiple description, reflection, and multiple
thoroughly developing experiences, and/or characters. (W.11-12.3.b) plot lines, partially developing plot lines, insufficiently developing
Write narratives to develop real or
events, and/or characters. (W.11- experiences, events, and/or experiences, events, and/or
imagined experiences or events Use a variety of techniques to
12.3.b) characters. (W.11-12.3.b) characters. (W.11-12.3.b)
using effective technique, well- sequence events so that they build on
chosen details, and well-structured Skillfully use a variety of techniques to one another to create a coherent Somewhat effectively use techniques, Ineffectively use techniques, creating
event sequences. sequence events so that they build on whole and build toward a particular or use unvaried techniques to a disorganized collection of events
one another to create a coherent tone and outcome. (W.11-12.3.c) sequence events so that they that fail to build on one another to
CCSS.ELA-Literacy.W.11-12.3.a
whole and clearly build toward a insufficiently build on one another to create a coherent whole or a
Engage and orient the reader by particular tone and outcome. (W.11- Use precise words and phrases, telling create a loosely connected whole or a particular tone and outcome. (W.11-
setting out a problem, situation, or 12.3.c) details, and sensory language, particular tone and outcome. (W.11- 12.3.c)
observation and its significance, conveying a vivid picture of the 12.3.c)
establishing one or multiple Skillfully use precise words and experiences, events, setting, and/or Ineffectively use precise words and
point(s) of view, and introducing a phrases, telling details, and sensory characters. (W.11-12.3.d) Somewhat effectively use precise phrases, telling details, and sensory
narrator and/or characters; create language, conveying a complete and words and phrases, telling details, and language, conveying an unclear
a smooth progression of vivid picture of the experiences, Provide a conclusion that follows from sensory language, conveying a clear picture of the experiences, events,
experiences or events. events, setting, and/or characters. and reflects on what is experienced, picture of the experiences, events, setting, and/or characters. (W.11-
(W.11-12.3.d) observed, or resolved over the course setting, and/or characters. (W.11- 12.3.d)
The extent to which the response of the narrative. (W.11-12.3.e) 12.3.d)
uses narrative techniques, such as Provide a conclusion that clearly Provide a conclusion that does not
dialogue, pacing, description, follows from and skillfully reflects on Provide a conclusion that loosely follow from or reflect on what is
reflection, and multiple plot lines, what is experienced, observed, or follows from and partially reflects on experienced, observed, or resolved
to develop experiences, events, resolved over the course of the what is experienced, observed, or over the course of the text. (W.11-
and/or characters. narrative. (W.11-12.3.e) resolved over the course of the text.
Criteria 4 – Responses at this Level: 3 – Responses at this Level: 2 – Responses at this Level: 1 – Responses at this Level:
Criteria 4 – Responses at this Level: 3 – Responses at this Level: 2 – Responses at this Level: 1 – Responses at this Level:
Coherence, Organization, and Consistently demonstrate clear and Demonstrate clear and coherent Inconsistently demonstrate clear and Rarely demonstrate clear and
Style coherent writing in which the writing in which the development, coherent writing in which the coherent writing in which the
The extent to which the response development, organization, and style organization, and style are development, organization, and style development, organization, and style
demonstrates clear and coherent thoroughly and skillfully address the appropriate to the task, purpose, and are appropriate to the task, purpose, are appropriate to the task, purpose,
writing in which the development, task, purpose, and audience. audience. and audience. and audience.
organization, and style are
appropriate to task, purpose, and
audience.
CCSS.ELA-Literacy.W.11-12.4
Produce clear and coherent writing
in which the development,
organization, and style are appropriate
to task, purpose, and audience.
Coherence, Organization, and Thoroughly develop and strengthen Develop and strengthen writing during Partially develop and strengthen Insufficiently develop and strengthen
Style writing during the writing process, the writing process, addressing what is writing during the writing process, writing during the writing process,
The extent to which the response skillfully addressing what is most most significant for the specific somewhat effectively addressing what ineffectively addressing what is most
develops and strengthens writing significant for the specific purpose and purpose and audience. is most significant for the specific significant for the specific purpose and
during the writing process, audience. purpose and audience. audience.
addressing what is most
significant for the specific purpose
and audience.
CCSS.ELA-Literacy.W.11-12.5
Criteria 4 – Responses at this Level: 3 – Responses at this Level: 2 – Responses at this Level: 1 – Responses at this Level:
A response that is a personal response and makes little or no reference to the task or text can be scored no higher than a 1.
A response that is totally copied from the text with no original writing must be given a 0.
A response that is totally unrelated to the task, illegible, incoherent, blank, or unrecognizable as English must be scored as a 0.
Does my response… ✔
Coherence, Organization, Engage and orient the reader by setting out a problem, situation,
or observation and its significance? (W.11-12.3.a)
and Style
Establish one or multiple point(s) of view? (W.11-12.3.a)
Introduce a narrator and/or characters? (W.11-12.3.a)
Create a smooth progression of experiences or events? (W.11-
12.3.a)