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Performance Task 22
Bibliography 27
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GRADE 11/12 | Oral Communication in Context
UNIT 12
Editing a Speech and Principles of Speech
Delivery
Deborah Bull, a writer and presenter, said, “Body language is a very
powerful tool. We had body language before we had speech, and
apparently, 80 percent of what you understand in a conversation is
read through the body, not the words.” The same is true of speeches
as well. Of course, it helps to use the right words in order to
effectively convey your intended meaning, and editing a speech helps
make sure that there are no inappropriate or offensive words in the
speech and that the speech is the best it can be. Remember, though,
that it is also important that you focus not only on the words of the
speech but also on the way you deliver those words in front of the
audience.
In the previous unit, you were introduced to the principles of speech writing. You learned
about several considerations regarding the topic and the audience, sourcing the information,
outlining and organizing the speech, and proper word choice and grammar. This unit will
provide you with essential information that will help you in both editing and delivering a
speech.
Unit Objectives
In this unit, you should be able to:
● edit a speech for content, organization, style, language, and grammar;
● use proper articulation and modulation in delivering a speech;
● exhibit good stage presence, appropriate facial expressions, gestures, and
movements; and
● establish rapport with the audience while delivering a speech.
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Lesson 1: Editing a Speech
You probably think that once you are done writing a speech, you
can then already deliver it in front of the audience. Writing the
speech is certainly important, but it does not end once the
actual writing is done. Before you deliver the speech, you should
first edit its content, organization, style, language, and grammar.
This lesson will teach you how.
Warm-up!
Think-Pair-Share Activity
Part 1: Choose any object within the classroom, and write a one-paragraph speech about it.
Part 3: Once you are done editing your speech, compile your first draft and the revised speech
and exchange work with a partner.
Part 4: Analyze your partner’s work and point out each other’s areas for improvement.
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Learn about It!
After writing, you still need to edit so that you can correct
errors and polish your speech. This is important because
editing can transform a dull speech into an engaging and
effective one.
1. Let it rest.
If you have enough time, put your speech away first before
editing it. Doing so will allow you to look at the speech with a
fresh perspective once you are ready to edit, and this will allow
you to be more objective when evaluating the speech and
deciding on revisions as well.
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this, you should use transition words in order to ensure that your ideas flow smoothly.
Examples of transition words are “for example,” “to put it another way,” “as I was saying,” and
“because of this.” For a more thorough discussion of transition words, you may review Unit 11.
When editing for style, keep in mind that short sentences are more straightforward and are
usually more dramatic. Check your speech, too, for words or word combinations that you
might struggle with. For example, if you know that you often mispronounce the word
supposedly or word combinations such as think tank, revise those words in your speech.
Now you know about the different considerations you have to take into account when editing
a speech. Let us take a look at this sample excerpt of an unedited speech.
The World Health Organization estimates that 9 out of 10 Filipinos die every hour as a result
of the consumption of tobacco. Even individuals who don’t consume tobacco are effected
because the sniffing of tobacco smoke also cause a diseases.
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If you smoke, do you want to subject your loved ones to such fate? Your act may bring you
relaxation and peace, but you are being narrow-minded and narcissistic.
How do you think the speech should be edited? Can you come up with your own edited
version of the speech?
Below is a revised example of an excerpt of a speech. Let us take a look and compare this with
the first draft. Examine the changes that were made.
The World Health Organization estimates that 10 Filipinos die every hour because of diseases
caused by cigarette smoking. Even those who don’t smoke cigarettes are affected because the
inhalation of cigarette smoke may also cause cancer, stroke, and lung and heart diseases.
If you smoke cigarettes, you probably do so because it makes you feel relaxed. But do you
want to be responsible for putting the health of your loved ones at risk?
The first sentence has been edited for both content and style. The statistics given were
double-checked and corrected. The words “because of diseases caused by cigarette smoking”
replaced “as a result of the consumption of tobacco” in order to make the meaning clearer.
In the second sentence of the draft, the word “effected” was used. This word means “brought
about,” so it does not fit the context of the sentence. Thus, it was replaced by the word
“affected.” The first draft also made use of the phrase “a diseases,” which is grammatically
incorrect. To correct the grammar and to provide more information, this was changed to
“cancer, stroke, and lung and heart diseases.” The whole sentence has also been edited for
style.
The last two statements were edited for organization, style, and language. The reason for why
someone smokes is placed right next to the phrase “if you smoke cigarettes” as the two are
closely related ideas. Also, the statement “you are being narrow-minded and narcissistic” may
be offensive to the audience. As such, it was edited for language and changed to the
statement “But do you want to be responsible for putting the health of your loved ones at
risk?” The different words used in the edited version reflect the writer’s style and better
convey the intended meaning.
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Check Your Understanding
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Lesson 2: Articulation and Modulation
Warm-up!
Triad Activity
Part 1: Form a group of three. Choose three one-line tongue twisters. Each member should
have his or her own tongue twister and recite it quickly ten times while maintaining precision
and clarity in spoken words.
Part 2: Each member should take turns in saying “What is this?” while varying the intensity of
his or her voice and with the following emotions:
a. surprise
b. fear
c. joy
d. disgust
e. excitement
Part 3. Present your group’s part 1 and part 2 activities in class as if you were contestants in a
talent show.
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Learn about It!
Articulation
To improve articulation, you can practice by reading the individual speech sounds or the
syllables of words while exaggerating or prolonging each sound or syllable. Open your mouth
fully and relax your tongue as you say each sound or syllable of a word.
Saying tongue twisters is a good way to practice your articulation. Recite each of the following
tongue twisters fast and repeatedly while maintaining precision and clarity in the spoken
words.
Modulation
Voice modulation, on the other hand, refers to varying the voice in terms of pitch, power,
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and pace, which makes a speech more pleasing to the ear and allows a speaker to convey
the right emotions.
a. Pitch refers to the highness or lowness of a voice. A speaker should vary the pitch to
reinforce the message. A high pitch is usually used to express lighter emotions like
excitement and delight, while a low pitch is suitable for serious emotions like sadness
and sorrow. Using the same pitch can be quite boring and monotonous for the
audience.
b. Power is the vocal energy or intensity exerted by a speaker. The speaker should create
power or intensity in his or her voice to emphasize points without being loud. One thing
that can help you do this is by breathing low. Relax and let your throat be open and free
of tension. An open throat will protect your voice and allow you to create a richer
sound.
c. Pace, also called rate, is the speed of a speaker’s utterance. Complex or important
ideas are usually said slowly (but not too slowly that the audience loses concentration
or becomes impatient), while light or exciting matters are often said rapidly (but not too
fast that words become slurred or unintelligible). A speaker should use a flexible rate
that will convey the message clearly and will give the audience time to hear and
understand it.
As you deliver a speech, vary the pitch and intensity of your voice as well as your pace. Proper
voice modulation makes the words stand out and allows you to be clearly heard and
understood by the audience.
Exercises
Exercise 1: Say the following statements aloud by using the right pitch of voice based on
the situations:
a. A student announces to her parents: “I won first prize in the spelling bee!”
b. A mother relays some bad news to her son: “Last night, as all of us were asleep, Wowie
breathed his last. He’s probably happy in dog heaven now.”
Exercise 2: Say “Why did you do this?” Vary the intensity of your voice. Say it with each of
the following emotions:
a. anger
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b. genuine confusion
c. hurt
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Lesson 3: Stage Presence and Facial
Expressions, Gestures, and Movements
If you are not comfortable speaking in front of a large group of
people, you would probably dread giving a speech. However,
when you do give a speech, you should not let your nervousness
show. Exhibiting a strong stage presence helps you to be more
effective in your speech delivery. This lesson will give you some
pointers in terms of stage presence and facial expressions,
gestures, and movements.
Warm-up!
Quad Activity
Part 1: Form a group of four. Think of how each member will say the following line:
“We should do it the right way because it’s the right thing to do!”
Each member should have a unique way of saying the line with appropriate facial expression,
gestures, and movements.
Stage Presence
Becoming a good public speaker does not only entail having the ability to speak eloquently
but also the ability to command the attention of the audience. This is called stage presence. It
involves the speaker’s appearance, projection, and manner on the stage.
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A speaker needs to have stage presence for the audience to be
willing to listen to the speech and be interested enough to keep
on listening.
Here are some more tips to help you develop strong stage
presence:
In public speaking, actions are as important as the spoken words. The coordination of verbal
and nonverbal messages is essential to successfully deliver the message of the speech. Recall
that facial expressions, gestures, and movements fall under kinesics or body language. A good
public speaker must use body language, among others, that supports the verbal message.
These are also factors that affect one’s stage presence.
a. Facial expressions reveal the speaker’s emotions and signal to the audience the
interpretation of the given message. The audience can read through your facial cues if
you are being funny, sarcastic, or serious. Make sure that your facial expressions do not
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contradict your verbal message.
b. Gestures are purposeful movements of the head, arms, hands, and other parts of the
body. A good public speaker uses a wide variety of gestures to support and illustrate
ideas. For example, using the fingers to signal order or sequence and raising a clenched
fist to emphasize a point are purposeful gestures. However, gripping the podium,
scratching one’s head, and putting one’s hands in and out of the pockets are distracting
gestures.
c. Movements, or the act of moving from one spot to another during delivery, can signal
transition from one idea to the next. A good public speaker considers the proper timing
of his or her movements. Moving toward the audience, for instance, is appropriate
when asking questions, making critical connections, or offering a revelation. On the
other hand, aimless pacing back and forth and bouncing are very distracting
movements. When you have no reason to move around the stage, stay still from the
waist downward, as this will help the audience focus on your message.
A good public speaker utilizes the body as a tool for illustrating and emphasizing ideas. Facial
expressions, gestures, and movements should be genuine, appropriate, well timed, and
clearly visible without being overwhelming.
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5. How do verbal and nonverbal aspects work hand-in-hand in an effectively delivered
speech?
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Lesson 4: Rapport with the Audience and
Delivering a Speech
Imagine yourself delivering a speech. You see that most of the
audience is not listening to you. Some of them have even fallen
asleep. How would this make you feel? Perhaps you would be
disheartened and lose your confidence. To prevent something
like this from happening, you should know how to establish
rapport with your audience.
Warm-up!
Creative Thinking Activity
Part 1: Take an item in your bag or wallet, and write a short speech about it. You may share
the origin of the item’s name, narrate the story of how you acquired it, or discuss its
importance.
Part 2: Recite your speech in front of the class. As you deliver your speech, try to relate with
your audience by maintaining eye contact and speaking naturally. Also, take the following into
account: proper articulation and modulation, stage presence, facial expressions, gestures, and
movements.
Building rapport means establishing a relationship with the audience by engaging them and
connecting with them. This is important when delivering a speech, as having rapport with the
audience would get them to enjoy your speech and help them remember your message.
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The following are some ways you can do to establish rapport with the audience:
b. Speak naturally.
Talk as if you are having a conversation with the audience. When delivering the speech,
make it look effortless, not overly rehearsed or robotic.
Although you made a script of your speech, you may choose not to follow it verbatim as
long as you are still imparting the same message and your words are still clear and
error-free.
For example, you may think of something on the spot that you would like to share. You
may then include it in your speech. Keep in mind though that this is best done when
you know your speech very well or when you have a copy of it with you during delivery.
Delivering a Speech
Delivering a speech involves taking into account the various principles of speech delivery. As
you deliver the speech, you should take into consideration proper articulation and
modulation. You should also exhibit good stage presence and appropriate facial expressions,
gestures, and movements as well as be able to establish rapport with the audience.
I first met Angela nine years ago when we became classmates. Back then, I didn’t think we
would actually become close friends. But here we are, nine years later, closer than we have ever
been. We don’t always get along, and we do have petty fights once in a while, and I’m glad she
hasn’t pulled out all my hair by now. Kidding aside, Angela, I’m sure you know I’m grateful to
have you in my life. You’re the sister I never had, and I appreciate the friendship we share.
You’re always there for me when I need you, and this goes without saying, but do remember
that I’m always here for you too. Now that you’re already 18, I know so many doors will open
up for you, and you’ll have more responsibilities as well. But I know you’ll do just fine. Heck, if I
know, you’ll grab life by the reins and boss it around until it does what you want it to. And I’ll be
just right beside you, cheering you on. Happy 18th birthday!
The given speech should be delivered in a lighthearted manner. In saying the speech, the
speaker should gauge the reaction of the audience and pause when necessary, particularly
when the audience laughs. Eye contact should be maintained throughout the speech, and
gestures are minimal, as the speaker would be holding a candle with one hand.
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Today, we all stand at the end of this journey and at the beginning of a new one. I am sure
that many of us are both scared and excited. We are scared because we don’t really know
what the future holds. We don’t know whether we will succeed at achieving our goals. We don’t
know whether we will be who we want to be. But we are also excited for all these new
experiences that we are bound to encounter and all the new people who will become a part of
our lives.
In this journey, may we find out who we really are and do our best to become who we really
want to be. As cheesy as it may sound, I hope that we all turn out to be the kind of individuals
that would make our parents and our school proud.
I also leave you with this quote from Harry Potter, “We’ve all got both light and dark inside us.
What matters is the part we choose to act on. That’s who we really are.”
The given speech should be delivered in a serious manner. Since this is a graduation speech, it
will most likely be delivered at a venue with a podium. Your gestures will be limited, so make
sure that you are able to command the attention of the audience using your articulation,
modulation, and stage presence. Also keep in mind that you should maintain eye contact with
the audience and establish rapport.
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5. The Minute Paper: In 1 minute, describe the most meaningful thing you have learned in
this lesson.
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Performance Task
Public Speaking for Public Health
Goal: Your task is to write and deliver a speech about the role of
regular exercise or physical activity in improving cardiovascular
health.
Role: You are a young cardiologist. You have been tasked by the
Philippine Heart Association to write and deliver a speech to a local
community. The prevalence of heart disease in this community is
the highest in the country.
Situation: The challenge involves coming up with a speech about the importance of physical
activities and regular exercise in improving heart health and reducing the risk of
cardiovascular diseases. Make it as interesting and as unique as possible. You need to
persuade your audience to engage in physical activities or regular exercise by informing them
of the negative effects of a sedentary lifestyle and the many benefits of getting involved in
regular physical activities. Explain how physical inactivity leads to many cardiovascular
disorders. Explain how people who engage in regular physical activities combined with a
healthy diet have a reduced risk of developing heart diseases.
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5. Write a detailed description and explanation of how cardiovascular disorders can be
prevented by exercising regularly and engaging in other physical activities.
6. Edit your first draft for content, organization, style, language, and grammar.
7. Your edited speech must contain a minimum of 2,500 words.
8. Consider the following when you deliver your speech:
a. proper articulation and modulation
b. stage presence
c. facial expressions, gestures, and movements
d. rapport with the audience
9. Print your finished product (first draft and edited speech) on short bond paper, Arial
font size 12, double-spaced.
Standards and Criteria for Success: Your project will be graded using the rubric below:
Criteria Beginning Developing Accomplished Score
(0-12 points) (13-16 points) (17-20 points)
Punctuality The first draft The first draft The first draft
and edited and edited and edited
speech were speech were speech were
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submitted more submitted a submitted
than a day late. day late. ahead of or on
time.
Total Score:
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Self-Check: How Well Did I Learn?
Do a self-check on how well you learned the lessons in this unit. Place a checkmark in the
appropriate box.
I think I need more I can perform well I am confident that I
Skills practice and with minimal can perform this on
assistance. assistance. my own.
I can edit a speech
for content,
organization, style,
language, and
grammar.
I can use proper
articulation and
modulation in
delivering a speech.
I can exhibit good
stage presence,
appropriate facial
expressions,
gestures, and
movements.
I can establish
rapport with the
audience while
delivering a speech.
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Wrap Up
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