The Thesis Statement

A successful, well-developed thesis statement states the point of your argument explicitly (clearly
and without doubt). Think of your thesis statement as the “road map” to your paper, which sets
the argumentative direction, or goal. The introduction is the starting point (with the road map),
your body paragraphs will be the “stops” along the way, and the conclusion paragraph is the “final
destination.” Using this “road map” helps to eliminate overwriting and inserting information that
does not support or develop your thesis statement.

Located most often at the end of the introductory paragraph, the thesis statement
fulfills two main objectives:

1. It states the topic of your essay (the subject/topic under discussion)

2. It conveys what you hope to prove about the topic (an informative or persuasive purpose
and the focus of your argument).

❖ A thesis statement must express a complete thought; do not create a fragment.

→ Fragment: how students learn to write
→ Complete thought: The best means for teaching student to write is to have them focus
on the steps of the writing process rather than the end product.

❖ A thesis statement must be an answer to a question

→ Research Question: Do Americans need large refrigerators?
→ Thesis Statement: If Americans did their marketing daily, as do some Europeans, they
could save energy and money because they could use smaller refrigerators.

❖ A thesis statement must use specific language to develop the paper’s focus. Do not use
vague language or unrelated elements.
→ Vague language: All novelists seek the truth, and some novelists are good
psychologists.
→ Specific language: In their attempt to probe human nature, many novelists strive to
reveal the intricacies of human relations.

❖ A thesis statement must be a declarative statement. Do not use phrases like “I think” or
“in my opinion” that will weaken the argument. Additionally, avoid stating a fact as a
thesis statement.
→ Weak: In my opinion, women have been repressed at different times and in different
cultures.
→ Stronger: The repression of women writers in America during the nineteenth century
contributed to the idea that there were relatively few writers worthy enough to be
included in anthologies.

❖ A thesis statement must be expressed using coherent and concrete language. Avoid
using figurative or muddled language.
→ Muddled/Figurative language: The amazons of today are trying to purge all the stag
words from the English language.
→ Concrete language: Today, many feminists are trying to eliminate the use of sexually-
biased words from public use.

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 Two Types of Thesis Statements
There are two types of thesis statements: an argumentative thesis statement and an informative
thesis statement. Determine your purpose for writing (to argue/to convince OR to explain/to
inform) before you begin the thesis statement process.

An argumentative thesis statement will

1. State your main claim, which is debatable (or arguable)
2. The reasons/evidence that support this claim
3. The order in which you will present your support (organization)

Step 1. Choose a topic: barn owls

Step 2. Focus the topic: barn owls’ nests and farmers
Step 3. Narrow the topic further by posting it as a question: Should farmers eliminate barn owl
nests?
Step 4. Answer the question. The answer is your thesis statement:
Barn owls’ nests should not be eliminated from barns [debatable issue] because barn owls help
farmers by eliminating insects and rodent pests [specifically states reasons/evidence to support
the claim].

What the essay will do: the essay would explain how and why owls help farmers in this way by
providing sources, examples, and support throughout the body paragraphs.

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An informative (or expository) thesis statement will

1. state what you are going to explain
2. outline the organization of your explanation

Step 1. Choose a topic: barn owls

Step 2. Focus the topic: lifestyles of barn owls.
Step 3. Narrow the topic further by posing it as a question: What are the lifestyles of barn
owls?
Step 4. Answer the question. The answer is your thesis statement:
The lifestyles of barn owls [introduces topic] include hunting for insects and animals, building
nests, and raising their young [states the explanation and outlines the organization]. *

*The thesis statement does NOT take a stand or make a claim that needs to be proved
throughout the paper.*

What the essay will do: This thesis statement establishes that the paper will provide information
on the lifestyles of barn owls. Using the subdivisions in this thesis statement -
1. hunting for insects and animals;
2. building nests;
3. raising their young - the writer can create separate paragraphs for each category.

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 Thesis Statement Checklist

The purpose of your thesis statement is to present the goal of the paper (argumentative
direction) and forecast its content (to be covered in the body paragraphs). Once you have
completed your thesis statement, ask yourself the following questions:

❖ What is the main point of the essay? Is it clearly stated in the thesis statement?

❖ What evidence supports the thesis statement?

Is your thesis statement...

❖ Expressed concisely in one complete sentence?

❖ Supported by details, facts, examples within the assigned pages (moving the reader
through time and space)?

Does your thesis statement...

❖ Answer the essay question?

❖ Make an argument and present a point of view (“yes,” “no,” OR “okay, but”)?

❖ Go beyond announcing your topic? (presents how/why and does not state a fact)

❖ Unify all ideas in your essay? (think: road map)

❖ Present a structure that you can follow in your essay?

❖ Include only the ideas you explain fully in your essay?

❖ Fit the evidence you use in your paper?

❖ Pass the “so what” test? (if your reader's first response to your thesis statement is “so
what?” then you need to clarify and make a stronger connection to the topic)

❖ Take a position that others might challenge? (for an argumentative paper)

❖ Use specific language to connect to your paragraph's topic sentences? (remember the
subject and treatment in your topic sentences)

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 Thesis Formation Exercise
**To write an effective thesis statement, start with a general idea and then sharpen your focus.
With a narrowed focus, you can present concrete evidence to help support your claim. The
broader your claim, the more evidence is needed to support your paper.

Step 1: Choose your topic or find your topic from a broad subject area

Broad Subject Area: Society and Individual Rights

a. Possible Topic #1: Home foreclosure practices
b. Possible Topic #2: Cell-phone Bans (e.g., while driving)
c. Possible Topic #3: Compulsory military (or alternate) service
d. Possible Topic #4: Government “wiretapping”

Step 2: Craft a focus through a research question (to sharpen your focus)

Should cell phones be banned while driving?

Step 3: As the writer, form an opinion to set the argumentative direction for your
paper

I think cell phones should be banned while driving in order to prevent any distractions on the
road.

Step 4: Create a working thesis statement to organize your concrete evidence and
support

In order to prevent any distractions and to keep motorists, passengers, and pedestrians safe,
cell phones should be banned while driving.

**As you write the rest of your paper, your working thesis statement may change in word choice
or sentence structure. However, it is important to keep your argumentative goal (what you plan
to prove, to argue, or to explain in your paper) the same**

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 The Turn-Around Method

The Turn-Around Method is one strategy to use when writing a thesis. This method of
developing a focused thesis statement poses questions about the topic, and then turns the
information around to form a sentence. Here’s an example beginning with a broad open-ended
topic – birds.

Start by asking simple brainstorming questions:

o What color is a cardinal ? A cardinal is
red.
o What foods do birds of northeastern America
eat? Birds of northeastern America eat
seeds, berries, and insects.

A good paper, however, needs somewhere to go – it needs

to have supporting points that can be explored through
careful analysis and research that is supported with
examples, facts, and specific details. Therefore, asking
more complicated questions can result in a more interesting thesis. The more focused the
question, the more focused the answer will be as well. The writer should then have a precise
purpose and direction for the essay, which includes several options to examine at length in
support of the thesis.

For Example:

How is the American cardinal able to stay in northern regions in the winter? The American
cardinal is able to stay in northern regions in the winter due to several adaptive measures that
ensure its warm body temperature.
Shivering
Fluffed feathers
Adjustment of metabolic rate

The wide range of possibilities within the simple topic “birds” has been narrowed down to a very
specific aspect of the creature’s biological adaptive mechanisms. Getting to this point takes time
and mental effort. The paper, directed by the decision of the writer to choose a narrowed focus,
finally makes a statement in answer to a complex question raised during brainstorming.

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 Using the inverted pyramid method will organize the broad ideas to create a more specific idea.
This allows you to prioritize your information and to determine what is essential to your
argumentative direction.

Identify Topic: _____________________________________________________________

Brainstorm five possibilities by which the topic could be examined.

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As the writer, which one possibility is of particular interest to you?
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After generating some good ideas, select one aspect to explore.
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Pose hypothetical questions about that one aspect
What factors determine…………..?
What would happen if……....?
When are ………………..?
How do………………?
Why are………….?

Now answer the one

A well-developed thesis statement is An effective essay, based on the five
question that has
required for research papers, literary paragraph format, includes an
analysis, as well as informative and been selected to introduction, three supporting body
argumentation assignments, regardless arrive at the paragraphs, and a conclusion. The
of length. The thesis, firmly established thesis. success of the essay will depend on
in the introduction, guides the direction determining at least three major
and specific focus of the research, factors, reasons, literary devices,
analysis, or argument. All supporting elements, effects, causes, etc. and
facts, examples, and details within the appropriate supporting details that stay
paper will point back as appropriate unified on proving the answer to one of
evidence to prove the thesis idea. these complex questions.

Thesis:

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