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Brown bear

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I've listed this article for peer review because I'd like to know how to improve this highly important article.

Thanks, Wolverine XI ^{(talk to me)} 17:41, 22 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]

@RoySmith and Vanamonde93: Pinging the two main reviewers of my last FAC. I took your advice and will be stepping away from narwhal for a little while. In the meantime, I've taken it upon myself to really work on this article. What are your thoughts? FA-level? Or in need of more work? I'd appreciate reviews below. Regards, Wolverine XI ^{(talk to me)} 21:14, 24 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]

OK, I'll be waiting for a maximum of 2 months for a response. I'm in no rush to get this article to FA-status. In the meantime, I'll be dropping at WP:Guild of copy editors. Wolverine XI ^{(talk to me)} 10:07, 28 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Comment: I think the "Interspecific predatory relationships" could use some trimming. I don't think interactions with smaller predators like wolverines and eagles is that important. One record of a golden eagle eating a cub is trivial, just like the line about a dead polar bear cub in a brown bear den. I suggest sticking to their main enemies and how they interact ecologically. The lines on polar bears could be rewritten using this as a source. LittleJerry (talk) 21:49, 2 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]

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 :{{Ping|RoySmith|Vanamonde93}} Pinging the two main reviewers of my last FAC. I took your advice and will be stepping away from narwhal for a little while. In the meantime, I've taken it upon myself to really work on this article. What are your thoughts? FA-level? Or in need of more work? I'd appreciate reviews below. Regards, [[User:Wolverine XI|<span style="color:#000080;">'''''Wolverine'''''</span> <span style="color:#8A307F;">'''''XI'''''</span>]]  <sup>([[User talk:Wolverine XI|<span style="color:#2C5F2D;">talk to me</span>]])</sup> 21:14, 24 June 2024 (UTC)
 ::OK, I'll be waiting for a maximum of 2 months for a response. I'm in no rush to get this article to FA-status. In the meantime, I'll be dropping at [[WP:Guild of copy editors]]. [[User:Wolverine XI|<span style="color:#000080;">'''''Wolverine'''''</span> <span style="color:#8A307F;">'''''XI'''''</span>]]  <sup>([[User talk:Wolverine XI|<span style="color:#2C5F2D;">talk to me</span>]])</sup> 10:07, 28 June 2024 (UTC)
+'''Comment''': I think the "Interspecific predatory relationships" could use some trimming. I don't think interactions with smaller predators like wolverines and eagles is that important. One record of a golden eagle eating a cub is trivial, just like the line about a dead polar bear cub in a brown bear den. I suggest sticking to their main enemies and how they interact ecologically. The lines on polar bears could be rewritten using [https://academic.oup.com/jmammal/article/96/6/1317/1174934?login=false this] as a source. [[User:LittleJerry|LittleJerry]] ([[User talk:LittleJerry|talk]]) 21:49, 2 July 2024 (UTC)