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This is an old revision of this page, as edited by Drcheech (talk | contribs) at 20:45, 13 October 2018 (Peer review for Vneph's "Congenital nephrotic syndrome" sandbox edits). The present address (URL) is a permanent link to this revision, which may differ significantly from the current revision.

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Drcheech's peer review for Vneph's edits to "Congenital nephrotic syndrome"

1. What does the article do well? The lead paragraph was MUCH stronger, with a clear yet concise summary of all the important points of the topic. It is written in a manner that should be easily understood even by non-medical individuals. The restructured and more complete symptoms section benefits from the initial list being converted to a prose form.
2. What changes would you suggest? Addition of specific genetic causes of the disease is helpful.
3. What's the most important thing the author could do to improve the article? Add more secondary sources! Looks like you are already on the way to improving this...
4. Did you notice anything about the article you reviewed that could be applicable to your own article? I really like the way you were able to use non-medical terms without dumbing down the content. I would like to work to do the same in my article. Good job!
--Drcheech (talk) 20:45, 13 October 2018 (UTC)[reply]