Talk:Elizabeth Dilling

Heritage

There's an awful lot of discussion of her ancestry on this page that doesn't seem germaine to her own history is may only be the contributions of those editors interested in promoting her as "racially pure." Should these stay, since they may be factual, or not, since they are potentially propagandistic? SNDLLN (talk) 01:47, 7 February 2013 (UTC)

2nd husband

"Her second husband, Jeremiah Stokes (1877-1954), was a lawyer and author. He published the antisemitic The Plot Against Christianity in 1964,"

A neat trick for Mr. Stokes to publish something ten years after his death! — Preceding unsigned comment added by 209.147.247.254 (talk) 21:40, 22 August 2013 (UTC)

Franco

Saying 'She believed Franco was a brave Christian' does not seem to get to what was different about Dilling. Surely everyone, including his foes, believed that Franco was personaly brave (as shown by battles in Morocco) and that he was a believing member of the Roman Catholic Church. I suggest this sentence be replaced with a summary of Dilling's beliefs, sourced from her books, that military dictatorship could be an acceptable alternative to Communism.173.13.153.50 (talk) 21:30, 16 June 2010 (UTC)

Untitled

Some mistake in dates, here. —Preceding unsigned comment added by 65.89.68.24 (talk) 20:53, 11 February 2009 (UTC)

Anti-Semitism has never been a crime in the US

Elizabeth Dilling Stokes (April 19, 1894 – May 26, 1966) was an American anti-communist and anti-war activist and writer in the 1930s and 1940s, who was charged with antisemitism and sedition in the Great Sedition Trial of 1944

The First Amendment to the US Constitution protects the rights of anti-Semites to freedom of speech. That was true even during the Second World War.Falange (talk) 21:05, 6 March 2009 (UTC)

Anti-semite

Ok, so we have a blog, a source that doesn't mention anti-semitism, and a single source. That's not enough for the lead IMO. Perhaps the body, but not the lead (or at least not an assertion of fact). Soxwon (talk) 22:54, 5 June 2010 (UTC)

OK. Where then? The lead calls her an anti-Communist, which is generally seen as a positive thing, but her anti-Communism was linked to her anti-Semitism.Jimintheatl (talk) 23:47, 5 June 2010 (UTC)

As for sourcing, I don't see how you're missing the anti-Semitism mentions in the refs, not all blogs are equal, and the cites are historical reference works.Jimintheatl (talk)

The "Women and war: a historical encyclopedia from antiquity to the present" link doesn't mention the word anti-semetic, anti-semite, or anything of that nature. A blog is a blog, and one source isn't enough for the lead. Soxwon (talk) 00:09, 6 June 2010 (UTC)

I don't know which ref you're reading, but read it more carefully, please. And, it's "anti-Semitic", self-published blogs are not RS, but blogs affiliated with established orgs are. I have cited 2 works by historians that refer to Dilling's anti-Semitism. So, sourcing aside, what about the issue of the lead treating Dilling as an anti-Communist, anti-war activist (not generally seen as bad things) but ignoring her darker inclinations (anti-Semitism, white supremacist, Hitler-friendly....)Needs work, agreed?Jimintheatl (talk) 01:07, 6 June 2010 (UTC)

I think reading her book 'The Plot Against Christianity'(1952) will settle the question of whether she was an anti-Semite or not. I vote yes; however it should be noted in the article somewhere that she only shifted to this view in the late 1930's. 173.13.153.50 (talk) 21:21, 16 June 2010 (UTC)

MLK, Civil Rights, etc.

The article mentions that she thought Gandhi, etc., were Communists. Did she feel the same way about Martin Luther King Jr., or the Civil Rights movement in general? I would assume that she did, but right now the article doesn't explicitly say so. Stonemason89 (talk) 02:13, 6 June 2010 (UTC)

She died in 1966, so her "productive" years predated MLK.Jimintheatl (talk) 02:59, 6 June 2010 (UTC)

Did She Visit Soviet Union?

The article states that when she returned to Illinois she began a tour exposing the workers' paradise as anything but. It is not explained what that was but implies the USSR and that she had been there? —Preceding unsigned comment added by 69.34.181.212 (talk) 00:43, 7 June 2010 (UTC)

Yes. She went to the USSR and took several films, showing them around the US with commentary in the early 1930's. See the 'Mother's Movement' book in the references for more info; it is the single best source of info I know of about Dilling. 173.13.153.50 (talk) 21:34, 16 June 2010 (UTC)

False Lines

Someone put a line at the end of the article saying Dilling put false lines in the Talmud. Though anti-Semites often fabricate quotes from the Talmud, the allegation was unsourced, so I removed it. Either a reference should be provided for this claim, or some examples should be provided, with links to the real texts (available online). 67.188.213.31 (talk) 08:56, 8 January 2014 (UTC)

A Clear Error

Apparently her second husband, Jeremiah Stokes (1877-1954) published her book in 1964 (note the ten year discrepancy!). Given the somewhat controversial nature of Dilling, it would be good if the article was as accurate as possible, and an error of this type might give ideological diehards an excuse to discredit the article. 85.76.168.47 (talk) 10:22, 27 January 2015 (UTC)

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GA Review

This review is transcluded from Talk:Elizabeth Dilling/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: Carbrera (talk · contribs) 03:27, 29 June 2016 (UTC)

Lead

Paragraph 1

• Insert a comma after "In 1934".

Early life and family

Paragraph 1

• Insert a comma after "In 1912".

Paragraph 2

• Omit "extensively" in the first sentence; it seems unnecessary.
• Insert a comma after "In 1923".

Paragraph 3

• Replace "when she noted a" with "where she noted a".
• Insert a comma after "in 1939".

Anti-communism

Paragraph 1

• Replace "she encountered, on her" with "she encountered upon her".
• Replace "on her doctor's advice" with "following her doctor's advice".
• Maybe break up the last sentence; it's a little lengthy. Or at some semi-colons rather than the excessive commas.

Paragraph 2

• Insert a comma after "In 1932".
• Replace "organisation" with "organization".
• Reword the first sentence somehow; it's a little disorganized.

Paragraph 4

• Replace "The book had been" with "The book has been".
• Replace "and sold more than" with "and has sold more than".

I rearranged it slightly.zzz (talk) 11:28, 30 June 2016 (UTC)

Paragraph 7

• Insert a comma after "In 1938".

Isolationism

Paragraph 2

• "It was the base of the isolationist America First Committee found in September 1940, which by 1941 had 850,000 members, and influential far-right activists Father Charles E. Coughlin, Reverend Gerald L. K. Smith and Lyrl Clark Van Hyning." could be reworded. It's just cluttered and hard to read.

Paragraph 3

• "7 March" ? Turn it around to March 7.

Paragraph 4

• Replace "in December 1941" with "on December 1941".

• Removed date. zzz (talk) 11:30, 30 June 2016 (UTC)

Paragraph 5

• Insert commas before and after "convened in 1941 to investigate fascist propaganda".
• Weird date: "21 July 1942" - turn it around.
• Another weird date: "4 January 1944".
• And another: "3 January 1944".
• And again: "29 November 1944".
• There's a lot of turned around dates; please fix them.
• Insert a comma following "in 1954".

End of GA Review:

On hold for seven days to allow for the aforementioned changes to be made. Please @PING me here with any questions, comments, or concerns. Thanks so much and good luck! Cheers, Carbrera (talk) 05:12, 30 June 2016 (UTC).

Thanks very much for the comments. I think I fixed everything. zzz (talk) 11:43, 30 June 2016 (UTC)

@Carbrera:zzz (talk) 11:44, 30 June 2016 (UTC)

Maps of the USA etc

Hello User:Signedzzz. the prose as it originally stood stated: "They spent a month in the Soviet Union in 1931, where local guides, who Dilling claimed were Jews, showed her a map of the US with Soviet city names, and warned her that communism would take over the world." This can cause confusion; I mean, what on Earth is a "Soviet city name"? The source states that what concerned Dilling was that U.S. cities would be named after Soviet war heroes after the US fell to communism. Thus, we really need to be mentioning that "communism would take over the world" first; it's not a major change, and I don't really see why anyone would oppose it. It's a simple amendment that makes things a lot clearer. We can always take this to 3rd Opinion if you like? Best, Midnightblueowl (talk) 20:49, 12 July 2016 (UTC)

No, the source (as I recall it) does not "state that what concerned Dilling was that U.S. cities would be named after Soviet war heroes after the US fell to communism". zzz (talk) 21:06, 12 July 2016 (UTC)

To directly quote the source: "Her fears were exacerbated by Russian guides, whom Dilling claimed were Jews. One guide told her communism would conquer the world, beginning with a revolution in China and culminating in the takeover of United States. The guides also showed her a map on which American cities had been renamed for Soviet heroes.27" It mentions the spread of communism before mentioning the map. We should too, for clarity's sake. Midnightblueowl (talk) 21:09, 12 July 2016 (UTC)

You said "The source states that what concerned Dilling was that U.S. cities would be named after Soviet war heroes". However, that is definitely not what the source says. zzz (talk) 21:12, 12 July 2016 (UTC)

Okay, granted I was wrong on that. But that doesn't in any way invalidate my argument that we should mention the conquering of the US first. Midnightblueowl (talk) 21:15, 12 July 2016 (UTC)

Moreover, on a wider level, Signedzzz, I'm certainly not trying to undo all of the good work that you have done with this article in getting it to GA status. Indeed, I thank you for that! However, I have a great deal of experiences with political biographies here at Wikipedia, and I think that there are a few ways in which I can improve on this article; for instance there were various problems with the list of sources (some titles weren't italicised etc), the lede doesn't really properly cover the article as per WP:Lede, and the article doesn't have sections on her personal life and ideology. These are all things that I know I can improve on; there's no need to feel threatened by me edits, I'm just here to help! Best, Midnightblueowl (talk) 21:15, 12 July 2016 (UTC)

And why are you repeatedly deleting (referenced) material I add in? Particularly without giving any reason. It's just not necessary. Midnightblueowl (talk) 21:22, 12 July 2016 (UTC)

Okay, this is just getting silly... Midnightblueowl (talk) 21:25, 12 July 2016 (UTC)

You're even reintegrating the old source system which was replete with errors. Looks to me like you're placing your own sense of ownership over this page above any attempt to see its faults and problems corrected. I've tried reaching out to work constructively but you just ignore by overtures and continue removing any edits that I've done. Midnightblueowl (talk) 21:30, 12 July 2016 (UTC)

"Various problems with the list of sources (some titles weren't italicised etc)": Books were not italicised, Journal articles were. In other words, it was fine (and had already been checked by other editors) zzz (talk) 21:35, 12 July 2016 (UTC)

I'll try to meet you half-way, Signedzzz. I'm not going to stand by and let you delete everything and anything I have added. You need to reflect on your ownership issues and recognise that Wikipedia is a collaborative effort. I am only here to help, and I have a great deal of experience in improving biographical articles here at Wikipedia so please don't treat me like some vandal. On the other hand, I appreciate that maybe you were annoyed that I began to use a different citation system and that I changed the formatting of the chunk quotations. I still would like to see those two things reformatted, but that's an issue we can deal with another day. In the meantime, I am going to reintegrate some of the more minor information that you removed back into the article. I'll try and restrict myself to re-adding the minor stuff, and will hold off on adding any new sections until we can agree on this together (hopefully with some RfC contributions too). I respect you as an editor and I really hope that we can work constructively on this one, because an ongoing edit war and mud-slinging isn't good for either of us or the Wikipedia project itself. Best, Midnightblueowl (talk) 09:43, 13 July 2016 (UTC)

No, please don't "reintegrate" minor information into the article. It is excluded for a reason. Thanks. zzz (talk) 09:49, 13 July 2016 (UTC)

And that reason is... ? Midnightblueowl (talk) 09:51, 13 July 2016 (UTC)

Early Life and Family section

What is it that you object to here, exactly? I've simply bolstered the prose in places with extra citations, particularly after direct quotations, including to one direct quotation that currently is not-referenced at all. I've added the name of Dilling's school with a link to the appropriate article on the subject, I've made mention of the Spanish Civil War in a sentence describing her travels in Spain, and I've slightly re-worded a sentence to better reflect the wording of the original source. To be honest, I can't see anything here that you could reasonably object to. Are you simply unhappy that someone else is contributing to your article? Because that's how it looks to me. Midnightblueowl (talk) 09:49, 13 July 2016 (UTC)

Which direct quotation did you "bolster with extra citations", and which direct quotation is "currently not referenced at all"? zzz (talk) 10:05, 13 July 2016 (UTC)

In the version of the page that you keep reverting to, we have various quotations that end sentences ("great improvement of conditions", "don't believe the stories you hear that this man has not done a great good for this country.") without any citation provided immediately afterward. Yes, there is then a citation at the very end of the paragraph, but in my (extensive) experience of getting articles to GA and FA, there will always be calls for ensuring that every direct quotation is cited at the end of the sentence, not the end of the paragraph. Adding an additional citation in these instances is very minor and simple and really not something that needs to be argued about, so why you insist on removing the citations is beyond me.

Moreover, the opening sentence of the "Anti-communism" section – "Dilling's political activism was spurred by the "bitter opposition" she encountered upon her return to Illinois in 1931, "against my telling the truth about Russia ... from suburbanite 'intellectual' friends and from my own Episcopal minister."" – isn't cited at all. I checked the citations provided at the end of the paragraph, and this quotation isn't actually in them. So I went and did some investigating of my own, found the necessary citation, and added it in after that first sentence (but you just keep removing it; again, why?).

Further, you still haven't given me any explanation as to why you have opposed my other edits. I'm waiting. Midnightblueowl (talk) 10:12, 13 July 2016 (UTC)

I did miss that cite. Added now. I don't agree that it is necessary to add cites directly after every quote for this article, obviously, or I would have done so already. Same goes for adding the name of her school. I don't think the Civil War needs to be spelled out, either, obviously, or I would have done so already: it is reasonably clear given the context, I believe. So that's covered everything you mentioned except "I've slightly re-worded a sentence to better reflect the wording of the original source" - which sentence is that? zzz (talk) 10:31, 13 July 2016 (UTC)

@Midnightblueowl: which sentence were you referring to? zzz (talk) 10:50, 13 July 2016 (UTC)

I was referring to the sentence discussing communism in the USA, however it's all in the checklist now. Best, Midnightblueowl (talk) 10:51, 13 July 2016 (UTC)

Checklist

Okay, I've seen that you have agreed to add a citation in after the quotation that had none. That's a good start. Now, let's look at the other issues on a point by point basis now. What is your objection to each of these edits? Midnightblueowl (talk) 10:29, 13 July 2016 (UTC)

• "Chicago, Illinois on April 19, 1894." - why do you object to the addition of the date, the linking of Illinois, and the addition of a further bolstering citation? Midnightblueowl (talk) 10:29, 13 July 2016 (UTC)

Originally it was Chicago, Illinois, as per MOS. Then a user changed it to Chicago, Illinois. I agree with this change. Linking both separately is wrong in cases like this.

The date is in the lead, just above.

You didn't say why you think that a "further bolstering citation" is required. zzz (talk) 04:46, 14 July 2016 (UTC)

• "the Academy of Our Lady." - why do you object to the mentioning of her school when we have a whole article about it? Midnightblueowl (talk) 10:29, 13 July 2016 (UTC)

Why do you want to add it? zzz (talk) 04:46, 14 July 2016 (UTC)

• " Christian scripture" - why do you object to the word "Christian", which helps keep things clearer for the reader? Just mentioning "scripture" could result in a reader gaining the impression that Dilling had been reading the scriptures of many different religious traditions. Midnightblueowl (talk) 10:29, 13 July 2016 (UTC)

Following normal usage in RS. zzz (talk) 04:46, 14 July 2016 (UTC)

• "Their relationship was turbulent; when Dilling discovered her husband was having an affair with another woman, she broke into the latter's home at gunpoint and threatened her. Albert gave his wife $100,000 not to divorce him, and although he promised not to commit adultery again, he had two further extra-marital relationships before their eventual divorce." - why do you object to the addition of this valuable information? Midnightblueowl (talk) 10:31, 13 July 2016 (UTC)

From an encyclopedic gender neutral perspective, it is not at all clear that this is "valuable information".

More importantly, what you added is factually wrong. The cite states "He soon acquired two new mistresses, and the Dillings separated twice before divorcing in 1943." And you omitted the mother's role in the break-in. zzz (talk) 05:11, 14 July 2016 (UTC)

• "warned her that communism would take over the world and showed her a map of the US with cities named after Soviet heroes" - why do you insist that we mention the map first when the source material mentions it second? Midnightblueowl (talk) 10:31, 13 July 2016 (UTC)

The current version is perfectly clear and more concise, and avoids talking about "Soviet heroes". No one else has objected to it.

• Why do you insist on leaving citations till the end of the paragraph in several instances rather than having them at the end of every sentence discussing a different issue? For instance, in one paragraph you discuss her travels in Britain, France, Italy, and the impact that they had on her, before then moving on to the Soviet Union; only at the very end of the entire paragraph do you have citations. A reader could reasonably think that those citations only apply to the information about the USSR and not the earlier material too. The additional citations don't cause you or the reader any harm and they make it clearer that the paragraph is fully or properly referenced. Adding them causes no problems and has clear benefits. Midnightblueowl (talk) 10:31, 13 July 2016 (UTC)

I am opposed to adding cites to the same thing repeatedly after each sentence. I remove these when I see them. Cites should convey useful information.

• Why do you oppose any mention of the Spanish Civil War? Readers unfamiliar with Spanish history (let's face it, that'll be a lot of people) won't be aware that the communist killings of priests, church burnings etc were part of the conflict. Midnightblueowl (talk) 10:33, 13 July 2016 (UTC)

Already answered above. zzz (talk) 04:46, 14 July 2016 (UTC) And why have you responded to many of my points only to delete those same responses all shortly after? What am I supposed to do in this situation; do I respond to them or not? It's very odd. Midnightblueowl (talk) 16:14, 13 July 2016 (UTC)

Lede

As per WP:Lede, we really should be rewording and expanding the lede so that it properly summarises the wider content of the article. At present it doesn't do that; it adds some core facts about her life and her significance but gives no broader biographical overview. To demonstrate how it could be improved just take a look at today's featured article, Margaret Murray, as an example; it is about a successful woman who lived around the same time as Dilling and so serves as a good comparison. Look at the structure of the lede; that is what we should be seeking to emulate here. I'm more than happy to work on putting a new lede together with you. Midnightblueowl (talk) 10:43, 13 July 2016 (UTC)

Again, why have you responded to my point only to delete your response shortly after? Midnightblueowl (talk) 16:14, 13 July 2016 (UTC)

Anyway, I'm sorry to have to take it to this level, but your comments here and here were sufficiently aggressive and abusive that I had to take them to the administrators' noticeboard to see what they think I should do about them. Such personal attacks were totally and utterly unwarranted. Midnightblueowl (talk) 18:50, 13 July 2016 (UTC)

As I said before, "please feel free to discuss your proposed changes". When are you intending to discuss - after an RFC?zzz (talk) 21:44, 12 July 2016 (UTC)

If my changes are getting instantly removed, and the Talk Page points I raise get rejected by you, how will we progress? The opinions of others will be useful here in allowing us to come to some sort of arrangement when it comes to the required improvements to the lede and article body. An RfC will be a good way of facilitating this. Best, Midnightblueowl (talk) 21:47, 12 July 2016 (UTC)

So far, you have discussed one point, above (and eventually admitted you were wrong). I would be happy to discuss any other changes, also. But if you prefer not to discuss with me, that's also fine. zzz (talk) 21:56, 12 July 2016 (UTC)

Of course I want to discuss it with you. That's why I reached out to you to start with. But given that the response was fairly 'hostile' (forgive me if that's the wrong word), i.e. mass deletions without explanation, I felt that this is a situation that should probably involve others to act as mediating figures and additional perspectives. (Moreover, saying that I "admitted I was wrong" misrepresents my argument there; I was wrong about saying "war hero" rather than "hero", but the rest of my point still stands, and actually stands unanswered). Midnightblueowl (talk) 22:01, 12 July 2016 (UTC)

Accusing me of "hostility" merely because I don't agree with your edits is obviously counterproductive. Please feel free to clarify what you think "stands unanswered", by the way. zzz (talk) 22:04, 12 July 2016 (UTC)

As I said, "hostility" may not have been the right word; however I am not using this term simply because you don't agree with my edits; my frustration was with your mass deletion of my edits without any explanation either in your edit summary or on the Talk Page. On your second point, you have not responded any further to my argument that the sentence should be restructured to mention the spread of communism to the US first. Midnightblueowl (talk) 22:06, 12 July 2016 (UTC)

• What particular content remains at issue?--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 05:11, 14 July 2016 (UTC)

• Hi TonyTheTiger and thanks for stopping by. Given that Signedzzz contests almost every one of my proposed additions, I shall produce a list and post it below. Your thoughts on any or all of these points would be gratefully appreciated. Midnightblueowl (talk) 10:07, 14 July 2016 (UTC)

The content issues at hand

"Early Life and Family" section

• At present this section is called "Early Life and Family", however a very large proportion of it deals with Dilling's travels in Europe and Asia. I suggest that it could therefore be renamed "Early life, family, and travel"; a very minor and not particularly important change but one which adds some additional accuracy. This is a change that Signedzzz has undone. Midnightblueowl (talk) 10:12, 14 July 2016 (UTC)

The travel was done with her family, as the article states. I have already addressed the other points in the section above, "Checklist" zzz (talk) 10:54, 14 July 2016 (UTC)

Concur with zzz.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 15:36, 14 July 2016 (UTC)

If the travels were mainly with birth family, I concur with zzz, if they were later in life they might move to new section/merge with existing sections.Pincrete (talk) 16:58, 14 July 2016 (UTC)

• At present the opening sentence relies solely on one citation and doesn't mention Dilling's date of birth. Granted, this isn't a major issue, but I added an additional citation and the date of birth (the latter being found in the additional citation) to this sentence. Signedzzz then removed these alterations. I can see no good reason for this omission; we often include dates of birth in the opening sentences of early life sections of biographical articles at Wikipedia, and two citations is hardly excessive. Midnightblueowl (talk) 10:25, 14 July 2016 (UTC)

First, we need to decide whether the WP:LEAD is going to be fully cited or fully uncited. Either all facts in the LEAD have WP:ICs or none of them do. Once this is decided, we can address whether these later citations are necessary. However, the LEAD is suppose to summarize the main body. No fact in the LEAD should be without equivalent or greater detail in the main body. This includes birth/death dates. There should be greater detail about birth in the body than the LEAD. Please include such detail in the main body.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 15:40, 14 July 2016 (UTC)

Sorry Tony, it looks like there has been some confusion here. By "At present the opening sentence" I mean the opening sentence of the "Early Life and Family Section"; it appears you are talking about the opening sentence of the lead. Sorry I didn't make that clearer. Midnightblueowl (talk) 16:33, 14 July 2016 (UTC)

I am either confused or wrong that I am not confused, but I do not believe I am confused. My point is that what is at issue in this point is subject to correctly formatting the LEAD. Once you decide which way you want to format the LEAD and do so, it will affect the response to this issue in some senses. Regardless, this section must have more detail than what is in the LEAD. The LEAD is only a summary of the main body.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 20:19, 14 July 2016 (UTC)

• The reliable sources give us the name of the Catholic girls' school which Dilling attended, and we have a Wikipedia article on the subject: Academy of Our Lady (Chicago). Given that it is typical to include mention of any schools that an individual attended in political biography articles here at Wikipedia, I added this information into the article. Signedzzz removed it, and when questioned on this course of action responded "Why do you want to add it?". My response would be that this is exactly the sort of information than an encyclopaedia such as Wikipedia concerns itself with, hence why school names are regularly found in other GA and FA-rated biographical articles. Midnightblueowl (talk) 10:12, 14 July 2016 (UTC)
  • Include this encyclopedic content.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 15:41, 14 July 2016 (UTC)
  • Include. Pincrete (talk) 16:58, 14 July 2016 (UTC)
• The article mentions that Dilling read "scripture"; I argue that we should make it clear that this is a reference to "Christian scripture" lest any readers think that perhaps she was reading scriptures from a range of religious backgrounds (i.e. was interested in comparative religion, which various figures on the far right were). Certainly, the addition of "Christian" is in no way detrimental to the article. Again, Signedzzz has removed this, commenting "Totally disagree. Possibly one of the most ridiculous things you added". Midnightblueowl (talk) 10:18, 14 July 2016 (UTC)

I support this reasonable clarification unless there is some good reason for its exclusion.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 15:43, 14 July 2016 (UTC)

reasonable, though not essential clarification.Pincrete (talk) 16:58, 14 July 2016 (UTC)

• There is a piece of what I think is quite significant information mentioned in the reliable sources but which is missing from the article. I added it in thusly; "Their relationship was turbulent; when Dilling discovered her husband was having an affair with another woman, she broke into the latter's home at gunpoint and threatened her.[3] Albert gave his wife $100,000 not to divorce him, and although he promised not to commit adultery again, he had two further extra-marital relationships before their eventual divorce." Signedzzz removed this, relating "Obviously, I thought about this, and decided it was not "valuable information"." Well clearly, I do think that this is valuable biographical information, as does the reliable source in question. I don't know why they would want to omit this information from the article, although its omission might suggest a desire to avoid mention of incidents which paint Dilling in a less-favourable light, in which case we have a neutrality issue at play. Midnightblueowl (talk)

This seems to be a strong encyclopedic contribution. It helps us understand the woman and her relationships, which is part of the purpose of a biography. I support including it.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 15:45, 14 July 2016 (UTC)

Include, I note that there is no 'personal life' section.Pincrete (talk) 16:58, 14 July 2016 (UTC)

I began to construct a "Personality and personal life" section but before it could be properly developed and expanded it was deleted by Signedzz. Midnightblueowl (talk) 17:14, 14 July 2016 (UTC)

• The article currently states "showed her a map of the US with Soviet city names, and warned her that communism would take over the world". Now given that the reliable source mentions communism taking over the world before Dilling being shown such a map, I restructured the sentence to reflect that source. Signedzzz undid that edit. However, I believe that mentioning the spread of communist first is appropriate. As I read it, the source implies that the "Jews" whom Dilling met in the Soviet Union claimed that communism will sweep across the United States, resulting in American cities being renamed after "Soviet heroes" (it explicitly says the latter). For this reason I think that mention of communism's spread should appear first in the sentence, and moreover it should be made clear that the map displayed would depict U.S. cities being named after "Soviet heroes"; after all, the US would have already appeared on Soviet maps with Russian names for its cities... At present the sentence doesn't really make sense. My proposed restructuring fixes the problems and makes it all much clearer. Midnightblueowl (talk) 10:49, 14 July 2016 (UTC)
  • Please clarify and contextualize as you originally intended. This is good editing.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 20:24, 14 July 2016 (UTC)

• The article mentioned burnt-out churches in Spain but does mention that these took place in the Spanish Civil War (incidentally, the reliable source used to cite this information does cite the war). Given that many readers unfamiliar with Spanish or modern European history may never have heard of the war, I felt that a minor mention of the conflict in the sentence was appropriate. Signedzzz removed it with "I don't think the Civil War needs to be spelled out, either, obviously, or I would have done so already: it is reasonably clear given the context, I believe". But this relies on the reader having a pre-existing knowledge of the conflict, which may well not be the case for many people; moreover, mentioning the war is not in any way at all detrimental to the article so its removal bemuses me. Midnightblueowl (talk) 10:29, 14 July 2016 (UTC)

Context of civil war is essential to understanding, possibly a sentence or so. Pincrete (talk) 16:58, 14 July 2016 (UTC

• • Contextualize.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 20:25, 14 July 2016 (UTC)
• Repeatedly, citations are left to the very end of the paragraph rather than being positioned at different points throughout the paragraph. In some cases this causes problems; for instance, we have a number of direct quotes which end sentences but are left without a citation immediately following them (in my experience, that's a no-no at Wikipedia and I've been called out for it at GAN and FAC's in the past). In others, we have a wide range of different topics discussed in a paragraph, all then relying on the citations at the very end. Again, something I've been called out for doing back in my early years as a Wikipedian. To correct this, I went through the paragraphs and integrated citations to the reliable sources at the appropriate junctures. Once again, Signedzzz undid these edits. However, these additional citations cause no problems, and moreover help prevent any confusion that the reader may have regarding what information comes from what reference, whether a sentence is actually referenced or not, etc. Midnightblueowl (talk) 10:36, 14 July 2016 (UTC)

I don't object to 'end of para' cites but citing controversial claims make more often make sourcing clearer. Pincrete (talk) 16:58, 14 July 2016 (UTC)

• • WP:ICs are always preferred.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 20:26, 14 July 2016 (UTC)

Lede

At present I am not convinced that the lede does the best possible job at matching the criteria for WP:Lede. At present it consists of two rather thin paragraphs, each of which mention some of Dilling's significant achievements but which give no wider discussion of her biography; it does not mention for example where she was born and doesn't give any wider outline of her life. The lede also mentions information (such as "Dilling's writings secured her a lasting influence among right-wing groups") which actually doesn't appear to be present in the main article body at all, which again is in contravention of WP:Lede. Previously I drew comparisons with yesterday's Featured Article, Margaret Murray, which is also a biography of a woman living at around the same time as Dilling, urging that we reformat the lede to look more like that of the Murray article; rather than a reasoned response I received a torrent of abuse here and here, which were admittedly later removed. Again, I had tried to make some tentative changes to the lede in order to expand it a little but these were pretty quickly reverted. Do others agree that the lede could be improved? Midnightblueowl (talk) 10:42, 14 July 2016 (UTC)

• • Make sure that the LEAD summarizes each section in the Table of Contents. Then confirm that you are attempting to have a fully cited WP:LEAD. Make sure each fact in the LEAD has a WP:IC immediately following it.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 20:28, 14 July 2016 (UTC)

References

At present, the referencing system is a little messy. We have footnotes followed by sources, but the two are not differentiated into sub-headings (which is of course the norm here at Wikipedia). Moreover, the list of sources displays some problems. Different sources are formatted differently; book titles are not italicised, books are described as first editions (this is only necessary when dealing with revised editions), some books are given location of publisher while others aren't, etc. I corrected all of these issues, but Signedzzz simply went in and undid this, without offering an explanation. Do I have support for re-introducing the division into "Footnotes" and "Sources" sub-headings and for standardising the format of the sources? Midnightblueowl (talk) 11:00, 14 July 2016 (UTC)

"Personality and personal life" and "Ideology" sections

As part of my attempted improvements to this article I added sections on Dilling's "Ideology" and her "Personality and personal life", in keeping with most other GA and FA political biography articles. Signedzzz deleted these. Admittedly both sections were fairly scanty at the time of their deletion, but I had intended to expand and build on them, using the appropriate reliable sources. Do others think that the inclusion of sections on these topics would be a good addition to this article? Midnightblueowl (talk) 17:17, 14 July 2016 (UTC)

There would need to be a reason to NOT include 'personal life', which would include the marriage mentioned above, and its problems. 'Personality' can be problematic. I note that there is also little 'criticism', either in her own time or since, though some of her 'battles' are within other sections.Pincrete (talk) 18:18, 14 July 2016 (UTC)