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Reviewer: The Most Comfortable Chair (talk · contribs) 06:31, 12 September 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Hello. I will be done with the review in a day or two. Thanks. — The Most Comfortable Chair 06:31, 12 September 2020 (UTC)[reply]

General

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  • There should be consistency in the number of patents approximated. Either use "9,957" or "10,000" throughout. I would suggest the former.
 Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 11:59, 14 September 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

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  • Should mention the date in the lead, preferably in the very first line.
 Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 12:04, 14 September 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Local fire suppression efforts were incapable of preventing the damage from fire due to lack of fire personnel and proper equipment." → "Local fire suppression efforts were incapable of preventing the damage due to lack of fire personnel and proper equipment."
 Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 12:07, 14 September 2020 (UTC)[reply]

History

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  • The flow of this section will follow a smooth timeline if the first and second paragraph switched places.
 Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 18:03, 14 September 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • "several thousand related patent models were destroyed." → "7,000 related patent models were lost." — "7,000" instead of "several thousand" as that is reported below, and "lost" instead of "destroyed" to prevent copyright issues from the source material.
 Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 18:13, 14 September 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • ""Congress authorized the covering of the building with a slate roof and the purchase of a fire engine for its protection against fires."" — Since it isn't a quote per se, it is better to write it out in our own words.
 Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 18:45, 14 September 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Unfortunately" — should use a formal term instead. Perhaps "therefore" or "because of that" or "because of those changes".
 Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 18:45, 14 September 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • "In fact, a complete firehouse" — remove "in fact".
 Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 18:45, 14 September 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Repertory of Arts & Manufactures" → "Repertory of Arts & Manufactures".
 Done

Aftermath

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  • "no one was ever identified as having caused the fire." → "no one was identified as having caused the fire."
 Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 18:54, 14 September 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • "are listed today" — avoid using "today". Perhaps use "were listed later" or "as of YYYY".
 Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 18:58, 14 September 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • "It is difficult for modern researchers to find those patents." — mention why.
 Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:13, 14 September 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • "After the fire unique numbers were used by the Patent Office for each new patent." → "After the fire, unique numbers were issued by the Patent Office for each new patent."
 Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:13, 14 September 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Henry Leavitt Ellsworth became its first Commissioner." — Mention the year.
 Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:13, 14 September 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Bibliography

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Endnotes

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  • Reference 2 — "Publisher" should be "Laws.com".
 Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:36, 14 September 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • Reference 12 — needs "Publisher" and/or "Work".
 Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:36, 14 September 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • Reference 14 — "Title" should just be "Back To The Future". It needs "Publisher" and/or "Work". And its date is "July 2006", not "2020".
 Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:36, 14 September 2020 (UTC)[reply]

That should do it. Thank you for your work! — The Most Comfortable Chair 06:52, 14 September 2020 (UTC)[reply]

@The Most Comfortable Chair: All issues have been addressed. Can you take another look. Thanks.--Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:36, 14 September 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Final

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GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects): b (focused):
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:
  6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:
    The article is well-written and thoroughly researched. Thank you for your hard work, Doug Coldwell. — The Most Comfortable Chair 03:44, 15 September 2020 (UTC)[reply]
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