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Good articleLily van Java has been listed as one of the Media and drama good articles under the good article criteria. If you can improve it further, please do so. If it no longer meets these criteria, you can reassess it.
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DateProcessResult
August 25, 2012Good article nomineeListed
Did You Know
A fact from this article appeared on Wikipedia's Main Page in the "Did you know?" column on August 25, 2012.
The text of the entry was: Did you know ... that 1928's Lily of Java was the first Chinese-produced film in Indonesia?

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Reviewer: TBrandley (talk · contribs) 05:01, 23 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]

I'll take this one. Cheers, TBrandley 05:01, 23 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]

  • Infobox: Add actors per production section
    • Not done exactly as you suggested, but noted
  • Lede: film. En-dash should be em-dash after that "film"
  • Lede: "Details on its cast and performance are contradictory, although the film is recognised as the first of a long series of ethnic Chinese-produced films in the country". Any reference?
    • In #Release and reception, but I'll cite as well.
  • Lede: "It is likely lost." → "It is likely a lost film."
    • Done
  • Premise: Wow, very small. Any way of expanding?
    • I'll take another look, but I don't have high hopes. Pareh had the same issue.
      • Nothing in Biran or Said; Biran just adds "the film had a simple story and showed a lot of tennis" and Said quotes an earlier work by Biran which says the same thing.
  • Production: Missing comma before "respectively"
    • Done.
  • Production: "General Motors" is missing "(GM)" at the end, as per MOS:ACRO
    • Not done, as the acronym is not actually used.
  • References: "Footnotes" and "Bibliography" should be actual sub-sections per MOS:ACCESS.
    • Done.

Though the article is small, because its lost, its still pretty solid. That's all above. On hold for now. TBrandley 02:21, 24 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]

OK. This article looks good. It'll pass. Congrats. TBrandley 14:02, 25 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]