User talk:Call me Bruno/sandbox

General

Take a look at your opening sentence...may need rewording.

Obviously you haven't done much linking yet. Make sure you do a thorough job of linking in the final draft. Sweiner02 (talk) 17:20, 24 July 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Focus on what distinguishes status migraine from other migraines, rather than repeating everything about migraines. You will need to give some brief overview, but this is way more than is appropriate here. Trim out 3/4 of the general migraine stuff and focus more on what makes it status migraine. Sweiner02 (talk) 17:20, 24 July 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Most of this is well cited, but there are some gaps, like the diagnosis and treatment sections. Sweiner02 (talk) 17:20, 24 July 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Abstract

I would try to focus more on the complication your describing and less on repeating general information about migraines. Sweiner02 (talk) 17:20, 24 July 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Signs and Symptoms

You may be assuming the reader knows a lot about migraines already. You may want to describe/mention how it is similar and/or different from a headache. Localized pain? General pain? Any other details...

What distinguishes status migraine from regular migraine? Talk less about what's true of all migraines, and more about that. Sweiner02 (talk) 17:20, 24 July 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Causes

Does this mean the mechanism is not known currently?

Which of these lead to status migraine? What is the mechanism difference between migraine and status migraine? Sweiner02 (talk) 17:20, 24 July 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Recent Research

This is looking good, but I hope you can find more to use. Sweiner02 (talk) 17:20, 24 July 2015 (UTC)[reply]