Wikipedia:Peer review/Oxford/archive1
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I've listed this article for peer review because I would like to know how it could be improved.
Thanks, TwentiethApril1986 (talk) 14:55, 16 April 2008 (UTC)
- Comments from The Rambling Man (talk · contribs)
Some basic suggestions to get you going.
- Check out Navenby. It just recently made featured status and is a good model to base your editing on.
- Expand the lead, per WP:LEAD.
- You have several sections which are simply bullet lists. For GA or FA you should be looking to make this into engaging or even brilliant prose.
- Go easy on the images, on my browser, some actually overlap. Judicious use and placement so as not to go over the top should be considered.
- For some of the commercial areas, just select the major ones to discuss, no need to list every single area. Same with cinemas and theatres - this isn't an alamanac, it's an encyclopaedia so it should really contain only items of note with justification.
- More citations are needed, see Navenby for a good example of how many you'd expect in a featured article!
There's a lot you can do already but feel free to get in touch if you need more advice. The Rambling Man (talk) 15:09, 19 April 2008 (UTC)