OET Letter Writing
OET Letter Writing
OET Letter Writing
Ms
Sarah
Hutchinson
Southside
Physiotherapy
Centre
87
Trout
street
Carina
Date:
10-04-2008
Re:
George
Arthur
Bacon
Date
of
Birth:
14-11-1940
Dear
Ms
Sarah,
I
am
writing
to
refer
Mr
George
for
a
home
visit
following
left
total
hip
replacement
surgery
on
3/04/2008.
He
has
been
on
physiotherapy
treatment
till
date
and
insists
on
early
discharge
to
care
for
his
wife
who
is
suffering
with
early
stage
Alzheimers
disease.
Mr
Georges
activities
were
restricted
since
last
year
by
grinding
pain
in
the
left
hip
and
he
has
had
difficulty
in
climbing
and
descending
stairs.
Following
surgery
his
X-ray
reports
are
normal.
His
physiotherapy
treatment
following
surgery
is
as
follows:
He
is
able
to
walk
with
a
walking
frame
to
the
shower,
and
walks
without
limp
with
the
aid
of
walking
stick
(07/04/08).
He
can
ascend
and
descend
stairs
with
the
aid
of
walking
stick
and
completes
exercises
regularly
which
include
active
hip
and
knee
bending.
Yesterday
he
was
educated
to
do
self-
exercises,
and
transport
and
home
help
was
arranged.
This
paragraph
is
a
bit
repetitive
Mr
George
is
a
retired
school
teacher.
He
lives
in
10
Foundation
street,
Carina.
His
Phone
number
is
39760753.
(subject
required)
I
would
like
you
to
continue
with
his
assessment
and
exercise
management.
Please
do
not
hesitate
to
contact
me
for
further
queries.
Yours
Sincerely
Physiotherapist
The OET centre uses the assessment criteria below when assessing referral letters
Overall task fulfillment The letter structure is quite good but the information does not flow smoothly. Refer to the model letter for this task for an example of how to make your letter more organised. Word length is better at 179 words.
Comment: Replace with: Dear Ms Huchinson (if you dont know her)or Dear Sarah (if she is a well known colleague) see below for details Comment: Incorrect title. You have 4 choices, & 1 & 2 are best 1. I am writing to refer Mr Bacon 2.I am writing to refer this patient 3.I am writing to refer George 4.I am writing to refer Mr George Bacon Comment: This sounds casual, Replace with: since surgery Comment: Present perfect required here, replace with: have been restricted For more details follow this link: http://oetonline.com.au/mod/assignment/view. php?id=73 Comment: An article is required for parts of the body. For more details follow this link: http://oetonline.com.au/mod/assignment/view. php?id=97 Comment: You need to add a subject after and as it is different to the subject of the first clause 1. First Clause: Georges activities 2.Second clause: George See below for more details Comment: No apostrophe required, Replace with: Yours sincerely
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Comprehension of stimulus
Appropriateness of language
You have included the key points, but the information during is not summarised clearly. At times you have written almost directly from the case notes. Remember the case notes are in short form and often have verbs and subjects omitted. It is up to you to put the subjects and verbs in when you create sentences, and it is much better to summarise the overall situation rather than lots of specific facts. Better paragraphing this time, with a strong introduction. However paragraph 3 and the conclusion could be improved. Refer to the model letter below for this task for an example of how to do this.
In this letter you made some errors of verb tense, articles and sentence structure. These are important parts of referral letters so work hard to gain a good knowledge of tenses. Refer to the information below, the useful websites on the course page and the Grammar and Vocabulary Clinic and study the rules, as you need this knowledge to approach the exaam with confidence. A few errors with titles and the closer, otherwise good
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