Ielts Task 2 How To Write at A 9 Level
Ielts Task 2 How To Write at A 9 Level
Ielts Task 2 How To Write at A 9 Level
! ! Foreword Chapter 1 Before we begin writing " " " " ! 1.1 What is required on the IELTS writing exam? 1.2 What is an essay? 1.3 Analyzing Task 2 essay questions 1.4 Common exam question keywords and instruction words
Chapter 2 The writing process " " 2.1 How to write an introduction paragraph 2.2 Coherence and cohesion
Chapter 3 Proving our thesis " 3.1 How to write supporting paragraphs
Chapter 4 Putting it all together " " 4.1 How to write a conclusion paragraph 4.2 Cohesion at the essay level
Chapter 5 Discussion essays " " 5.1 How to analyze a topic in an essay 5.2 What is the difference between argument and discussion essays?
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Foreword
This eBook has been written to provide the IELTS student with a brief summary outlining how to write an effective essay in the Task 2 portion of the IELTS exam. It is hoped that this eBook acts as a supplement to the students repertoire of IELTS writing resources and not the students sole source of guidance for their studies in essay writing. Although valuable, reading up on the subject of IELTS essay writing alone will not ascertain success on the Task 2 portion of the IELTS exam. Students should be actively practicing their essay writing skills on a regular basis with direct instruction from an IELTS instructor. Regarding structure, readers may at first feel the organization of this book seems awkward. Directions on how to write introduction, supporting and conclusion paragraphs are not grouped into a single chapter but rather intertwined among subjects such as basic essay structure, essay question analysis, coherence and cohesion and thesis writing. It is felt that in presenting these subjects in this manner, the student of IELTS essay writing will be better able to understand how each can be used to strengthen their abilities.
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Answers: (1) 60 (2) different (3) 2 (4) descriptive report (5) essay (6) letter (7) allot
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The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format. A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences). Look at this essay structure: Paragraph 1 - Introduction ! ! ! ! Sentence 1 - Background statement Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement Sentence 3 - Thesis Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph ! ! ! ! Sentence 1 - Topic sentence Sentence 2 - Example Sentence 3 - Discussion Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph ! ! ! ! Sentence 1 - Topic sentence Sentence 2 - Example Sentence 3 - Discussion Sentence 4 - Conclusion
Paragraph 4 - Conclusion ! ! ! Sentence 1 - Summary Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation
This essay structure contains a total of 15 sentences and will put your essay at roughly 250-275 words. Each sentence should be short, written clearly and should link to other ideas presented in We will learn about how to do this in Chapter 2. the essay using cohesive phrases.
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concept, but it is surprising how many students go off on tangents in their writing, discussing
We also
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What is a thesis? An essays thesis is only one sentence long, but it is the most important sentence in the entire essay. The reason for this is because it is the sentence that states our opinion in relation to what A thesis is very easy to write. Often, the thesis will Thus, in the example question above our is being asked of us by the essay question. thesis can only be one of two things: It is agreed that technology will replace teachers in the classroom. Or It is not agreed that technology will replace teachers in the classroom. Remember, writing your thesis using a few words from your essay question is effective because your examiner will clearly see the link between your essay question and your essay. areas of your essay, however, try to vary your vocabulary as much as you can. In other
Try it yourself!
With a friend, discuss what the scope, keywords and instruction words are for these sample Task 2 writing questions: Public transportation is a great way to travel, particularly within a metropolis. is the most convenient way to get around a city. Scope: Keywords: Instruction words: Increasingly, the western world has been outsourcing its labour-related jobs to cheaper alternatives available in less-developed countries. Although this creates opportunities for Write an essay people in poorer nations, it is a policy that is criticized by many in the west. The metro
response supporting the case for the outsourcing of labour related jobs. Scope: Keywords: Instruction words:
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Violence among young people has increased dramatically over the past 50 years. moves in tandem with the growth in violent media. violent media is the main cause of violence among young people. Scope: Keywords: Instruction words:
This rise
As more and more students enter universities, academic qualifications are becoming devalued. To get ahead in many professions, more than one degree is now required and in Take a stance and respond to this argument. future it is likely that people will take a number of degree courses before even starting work. This is an undesirable situation. Scope: Keywords: Instruction words:
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contrast these two ideas, compare these issues, discuss these ideas present a discussion on this issue, discuss this topic, analyze this topic
the introduction to your essay, they should already know exactly what the rest of your essay will Lets look at the structure of an argument essays introduction paragraph in detail. As we saw before, the introduction paragraph has four sentences: # # # # Background sentence Detailed background sentence Thesis Outline
The background sentence simply says something general about the topic given in the essay question. It does NOT state any opinion about the essay question. In the case of our essay question, we would say something general about technology. For example:
In today's world, the use of technology is ever increasing. Here, we have written a general sentence about one of the main topics of our essay question: technology. statement. The second sentence in our introduction paragraph is a more detailed background So in this sentence, we would probably want to include some information about the Thus a detailed background sentence for this
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As you recall, the thesis is the most important sentence in your entire essay because it answers the essay question directly. In the case of our essay question, we are being asked if we agree or Lets disagree that technology will someday take the place of a teacher in the classroom. think about this question for a second: What will this mean? students will learn entirely from computers Is this likely? probably not Why not? because a robotic teacher would not be able to discipline misbehaving students because a robotic teacher would be less able to cater to a students individual needs because a robotic teacher would have little authority in the classroom because a robotic teachers classroom would be boring and would hinder learning etc Is it easier to agree with this statement or disagree? disagree! Now that we have decided our opinion regarding this subject, lets write our thesis as a direct response to the essay question: It is disagreed that technology will completely replace the teacher in the classroom. So far we have finished our background, detailed background and thesis sentences and our introduction paragraph is really starting to take shape, but we still need to tell our IELTS examiner what points we are going to use to support this thesis. IELTS exam essay, you should use 2 points. supporting paragraphs. real examples for later on: Analyzing both the inability of a technology-driven teacher to discipline students in a classroom as well as this robotic teachers hindrance to a students learning process will show this. The outline sentence does this. In your Each point will be discussed separately in your Lets choose 2 that we can find
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Congratulations!
In todays world, the use of technology is ever-increasing. can be commonly seen. classroom. this.
classroom as well as this robotic teachers hindrance to a students learning process will show
As you can see, anyone looking at your introduction paragraph knows exactly what you will talk about in the rest of the essay. The introduction paragraph contains your argument (thesis) as well as what topics you will use to support your argument (shown in your outline sentence).
Try it yourself!
With a friend, discuss this essay question and brainstorm some ideas that support it and some ideas that refute it. Then choose to agree or disagree based on which path you think is easiest. Finally, write the introduction paragraph for an essay: Public transportation is a great way to travel, particularly within a metropolis. Shanghai metro is the most convenient way to get around the city. disagree? ______________________________________________________________________________ ______________________________________________________________________________ ______________________________________________________________________________ ______________________________________________________________________________ ______________________________________________________________________________ ______________________________________________________________________________ Lets try a harder essay question: Violence among young people has increased dramatically over the past 50 years. moves in tandem with the growth in violent media. violent media is the main cause of violence among young people. This rise The
Do you agree or
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One more time: Increasingly, the western world has been outsourcing its labour-related jobs to cheaper alternatives available in less-developed countries. Although this creates opportunities for Write an essay people in poorer nations, it is a policy that is criticized by many in the west.
response supporting the case for the outsourcing of labour related jobs. ______________________________________________________________________________ ______________________________________________________________________________ ______________________________________________________________________________ ______________________________________________________________________________ ______________________________________________________________________________ ______________________________________________________________________________
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using linking words in your writing to create relationships between the various sentences and
should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words. every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort. that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
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Which linking words did we use? The paragraph we wrote as our introduction made use of linking words. Here, they have been outlined in red: In todays world, the use of technology is ever-increasing. can be commonly seen. classroom. this. Lets look at how these linking words help all sentences in the paragraph work as a team. Even in this is a phrase used in English to make it clear that a topics characteristics match the characteristics of a topic presented before it. In our intro paragraph above, we are saying that Can you see how even in links the ideas of technology in the classroom is also ever-increasing. Even in classrooms technology Can you identify them?
classroom as well as this robotic teachers hindrance to a students learning process will show
our background sentence with our detailed background sentence? This probably the most commonly used linking word, here this refers to our thesis and states that the supporting ideas of lack of discipline and educational hindrance will act in support of this thesis. Can you see how the word this causes the outline sentence to link with the idea presented in the thsis?
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In Chapter 1, we wrote the introduction paragraph to this essay question: Technology is becoming increasingly prevalent in the world today. will completely replace the teacher in the classroom. statement? Lets read this intro paragraph again, paying close attention to the fourth sentence, the outline sentence: In todays world, the use of technology is ever-increasing. can be commonly seen. classroom. this. This outline sentence (shown in red) dictates the topics we must use in our supporting paragraphs: the inability of a technology-driven teacher to discipline students the hindrance a robotic teacher would cause to the learning process of a student Lets brainstorm some Even in classrooms technology Given time, technology
classroom as well as this robotic teachers hindrance to a students learning process will show
Can you think of any real life examples that show these topics in action? ideas the inability of a technology-driven teacher to discipline students o kids would not feel the need to listen to a robotic teacher
o kids naturally fool around in class and a robotic teacher would have a harder time interpreting misbehavior is occurring the hindrance a robotic teacher would cause to the learning process of a student o ...students often do not understand and need the teacher to explain in different ways, this is a teaching method that a robotic teacher could not employ o kids require more motivation to be taught effectively and this is something that a robotic teacher simply could not offer
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We have come up with 2 supporting examples for both topics introduced in our outline sentence. Our next step is to choose the examples that we feel are strongest. made above, lets go with: o kids naturally fool around in class and a robotic teacher would have a harder time interpreting misbehavior is occurring and o kids require more motivation to be taught effectively and this is something that a robotic teacher simply could not offer When we finish this step, writing the supporting paragraphs to our essay becomes actually quite easy! All we have to do now is write out the 4 needed sentences paying close attention to our The first sentence is our topic: coherence and cohesion. Looking at the brainstorm we
Firstly, a teacher powered by artificial intelligence would have little to no control over its students. In this sentence (the topic sentence), we are simply stating the topic we declared in our outline sentence of the introduction paragraph. This sentence should be very clear and its meaning should exactly match the meaning presented in the introduction paragraphs outline sentence. Now we need to support this claim with our example: For example, it is commonly understood that children require the watchful eye of a teacher to ensure that they are indeed completing their class work and not fooling around during class time. Can you see how the example directly supports the topic by presenting some factual, real-life info? We have referred to the idea of children, who universally misbehave, and have used this to show a true example of why a robotic teacher is a poor idea. Now we must link this example sentence to our topic sentence. why this example proves our topic. We need a sentence that shows
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The last sentence in your supporting paragraph is the So our conclusion sentence here woud
This sentence is very important as it has to link the topic and argument
Thus this makes it clear why technology will never completely replace the teacher in the classroom. That is all there is to it! Now lets put the sentences of our supporting paragraph together:
Firstly, a teacher powered by artificial intelligence would have little to no control over its students. class time. For example, it is commonly understood that children require the watchful eye of a Unfortunately this is something that a robotic teacher simply cannot provide. Thus teacher to ensure that they are indeed completing their class work and not fooling around during this makes it clear why technology will never completely replace the teacher in the classroom.
Can you see how the sentences in this paragraph work together? linking words.
Try it yourself!
Now you are ready to try. below. Look at the steps we took to create the first supporting paragraph. You
Use the same process to come up with the content of the second supporting paragraph and write it Remember, the topic and example of this paragraph have already been decided. will be writing about how a robotic teachers hinders the learning process of a student and using childrens motivational needs as your example. _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________
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Secondly, a robotic teacher would disrupt a students learning process and in effect slow a students ability to absorb information from lessons. taught effectively. do not. For instance, kids require motivation to be Such is a quality human teachers possess but technologically driven instructor
From this it becomes quite evident that robotic instructors will never take the place of
We have now finished both supporting paragraphs of our essay. entirety: In todays world, the use of technology is ever-increasing. can be commonly seen. classroom. this.
classroom as well as this robotic teachers hindrance to a students learning process will show Firstly, a teacher powered by artificial intelligence would have little to no control over its students. class time. For example, it is commonly understood that children require the watchful eye of a Unfortunately this is something that a robotic teacher simply cannot provide. Thus teacher to ensure that they are indeed completing their class work and not fooling around during this makes it clear why technology will never completely replace the teacher in the classroom. Secondly, a robotic teacher would disrupt a students learning process and in effect slow a students ability to absorb information from lessons. taught effectively. do not. For instance, kids require motivation to be Such is a quality human teachers possess but technologically driven instructor
From this it becomes quite evident that robotic instructors will never take the place of
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Now lets read the essay again and look for signs of cohesion: In todays world, the use of technology is ever-increasing. can be commonly seen. classroom. this. Firstly, a teacher powered by artificial intelligence would have little to no control over its students. class time. For example, it is commonly understood that children require the watchful eye of a Unfortunately this is something that a robotic teacher simply cannot provide. Thus teacher to ensure that they are indeed completing their class work and not fooling around during this makes it clear why technology will never completely replace the teacher in the classroom. Secondly, a robotic teacher would disrupt a students learning process and in effect slow a students ability to absorb information from lessons. taught effectively. do not. For instance, kids require motivation to be Such is a quality human teachers possess but technologically driven instructor Even in classrooms technology
classroom as well as this robotic teachers hindrance to a students learning process will show
From this it becomes quite evident that robotic instructors will never take the place of
real teachers in a classroom. Can you see the way the sentences create cohesion between each other using linking words (highlighted in red)? Do you see how the paragraphs create cohesion between each other using This is a solid piece of writing that puts together a both linking words (firstly, secondly) and their conclusion sentences that link back to our thesis (all of these examples are underlined)? well-structured argument. sentences (and paragraphs) before it. Each sentence is clear and builds upon the ideas presented in the
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Try it yourself!
Now, try this exercise yourself. missing paragraphs. In achieving personal happiness, our relationships with other people (family, friends, colleagues) are more important than anything else. second place. Issues such as work and wealth take Argue in support of this claim. Here we have an essay with an introduction paragraph and Read the essay question and write the 2
The increasing pressures of today's money driven world can often cause people to gravitate toward material items. But personal happiness can never be achieved through such things as Although these things may be nice 'extras', it is argued that healthy This work, success and wealth.
relationships with family, friends and colleagues are the true secrets to personal happiness. of older people who speak from experience.
will be shown be analyzing the often lonely lives of many wealthy celebrities as well as the advice _____________________________________________________________________________ _____________________________________________________________________________ _____________________________________________________________________________ _____________________________________________________________________________ _____________________________________________________________________________ _____________________________________________________________________________ _____________________________________________________________________________ _____________________________________________________________________________ _____________________________________________________________________________ _____________________________________________________________________________ _____________________________________________________________________________ _____________________________________________________________________________ _____________________________________________________________________________ _____________________________________________________________________________ _____________________________________________________________________________ _____________________________________________________________________________ _____________________________________________________________________________ _____________________________________________________________________________ _____________________________________________________________________________ As seen above, wealth can not buy true happiness and everyone comes to this realization in their old age. It is true, family, friends and colleagues and the relationships formed with them are Thus, the more love you give, the more you get! what creates happiness.
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paragraph you wrote in chapter 1 in response to the question below. Violence among young people has increased dramatically over the past 50 years. moves in tandem with the growth in violent media. violent media is the main cause of violence among young people. This rise
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Lets try again: Increasingly, the western world has been outsourcing its labour-related jobs to cheaper alternatives available in less-developed countries. Although this creates opportunities for Write an essay people in poorer nations, it is a policy that is criticized by many in the west.
response supporting the case for the outsourcing of labour related jobs. _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________
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The summary sentence restates the topics that were discussed in supporting paragraphs 1 and 2. It should begin with a linking phrase such as 'To summarize' or 'In summary'. thesis simply repeats the thesis in different words. The restatement of The last sentence can be written as a The
prediction (a logical guess as to what will happen to your essay subject in the future) or a recommendation (what you hope will become true concerning your essay subject). themselves too much. But remember that this is not an error. conclusion paragraph is sometimes confusing to students because they feel they are repeating A proper essay should have unity and by writing your conclusion as a mirror reflection of your introduction you will achieve this. Now take a quick look at the entire structure of the essay. this structure to memory. are similar? supporting paragraphs? Paragraph 1 - Introduction ! ! ! ! Sentence 1 - Background statement Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement Sentence 3 - Thesis Sentence 4 - Outline sentence By now you should have committed
Can you see how the essay's introduction and conclusion paragraphs
Can you see how they work to frame the supporting information given in the
Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph ! ! ! ! Sentence 1 - Topic sentence Sentence 2 - Example Sentence 3 - Discussion Sentence 4 - Conclusion
Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph ! ! ! ! Sentence 1 - Topic sentence Sentence 2 - Example Sentence 3 - Discussion Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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Paragraph 4 - Conclusion ! ! ! Sentence 1 - Summary Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation
Lets look at the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs that we have written for our initial essay question: In todays world, the use of technology is ever-increasing. can be commonly seen. classroom. this. Firstly, a teacher powered by artificial intelligence would have little to no control over its students. class time. For example, it is commonly understood that children require the watchful eye of a Unfortunately this is something that a robotic teacher simply cannot provide. Thus teacher to ensure that they are indeed completing their class work and not fooling around during this makes it clear why technology will never completely replace the teacher in the classroom. Secondly, a robotic teacher would disrupt a students learning process and in effect slow a students ability to absorb information from lessons. taught effectively. do not. For instance, kids require motivation to be Such is a quality human teachers possess but technologically driven instructor Even in classrooms technology
classroom as well as this robotic teachers hindrance to a students learning process will show
From this it becomes quite evident that robotic instructors will never take the place of
As stated above, the first sentence of our conclusion paragraph should summarize the topics we have discussed in our supporting paragraphs. sentence: a robotic teachers lack of discipline in the classroom a robotic teachers disservice to its students learning needs Thus, we need to group these ideas into one
In summary, a robotic teacher lacks the discipline needed to instruct students properly and actually operates to retard a students ability to learn new information.
It is disagreed that technology will completely replace the teacher in the classroom.
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OK, now that we have the basic understanding, lets change disagree to cannot support and rearrange the other words a bit: Thus it is clear why the idea of having a class run entirely by a machine cannot be supported. The last sentence can be written as a recommendation or prediction. Lets go with a prediction:
After analyzing this subject, it is predicted that the negative aspects of the debate over computerized teaching will forever be stronger than the positive ones and because of this computers will never replace teachers. Our conclusion paragraph is now complete. Lets put the sentences together:
In summary, a robotic teacher lacks the discipline needed to instruct students properly and actually operates to retard a students ability to learn new information. idea of having a class run entirely by a machine cannot be supported. Thus it is clear why the After analyzing this
subject, it is predicted that the negative aspects of the debate over computerized teaching will forever be stronger than the positive ones and because of this computers will never replace teachers. Quickly scanning for cohesion, we can see that this paragraph links both among its sentences and among the former paragraphs of the essay. Congratulations! You have written a well-structured, cohesive essay! Start to finish it reads:
In todays world, the use of technology is ever-increasing. can be commonly seen. classroom. this.
classroom as well as this robotic teachers hindrance to a students learning process will show Firstly, a teacher powered by artificial intelligence would have little to no control over its students. class time. For example, it is commonly understood that children require the watchful eye of a Unfortunately this is something that a robotic teacher simply cannot provide. Thus teacher to ensure that they are indeed completing their class work and not fooling around during this makes it clear why technology will never completely replace the teacher in the classroom. Secondly, a robotic teacher would disrupt a students learning process and in effect slow a students ability to absorb information from lessons. taught effectively. do not. For instance, kids require motivation to be Such is a quality human teachers possess but technologically driven instructor
From this it becomes quite evident that robotic instructors will never take the place of
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In summary, a robotic teacher lacks the discipline needed to instruct students properly and actually operates to retard a students ability to learn new information. Thus it is clear why the After analyzing this idea of having a class run entirely by a machine cannot be supported.
subject, it is predicted that the negative aspects of the debate over computerized teaching will forever be stronger than the positive ones and because of this computers will never replace teachers. As a whole, can you see how the sentences link together? How about the paragraphs? Do you
see how the summary links not only to the supporting paragraphs but also back to the introduction? Can you feel how the introduction paragraph provides a map of the entire essay? Can you see how the conclusion paragraphs compliments this map and brings the entire essay to a close?
Try it yourself!
Now try an essay from start to finish. guidance. In some cultures, children must follow very strict rules of behaviour while in others they are allowed to do almost anything they want. the world today. Technology is becoming increasingly prevalent in Given time, technology will completely replace the teacher in the classroom. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? Look to the essay we wrote together if you need some
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Try again.
Really focus on your cohesion and making sure the entire essay works as a large,
cohesive unit. The age of information technology has taken a lot of people by surprise. become a way of life for some, others know very little about it. polarised society and this will lead to serious social problems. While it has
the info above and write a well-reasoned essay. _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________
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classroom as well as this robotic teachers hindrance to a students learning process will show
From this it becomes quite evident that robotic instructors will never take the place of
real teachers in a classroom. In summary, a robotic teacher lacks the discipline needed to instruct students properly and actually operates to retard a students ability to learn new information. Thus it is clear why the After analyzing this idea of having a class run entirely by a machine cannot be supported.
subject, it is predicted that the negative aspects of the debate over computerized teaching will forever be stronger than the positive ones and because of this computers will never replace teachers. In yellow, we can see our supporting paragraphs topic sentences referring back to the information presented in our introduction paragraphs outline sentence. In blue, our supporting paragraph conclusion sentences directly link each supporting paragraphs idea back to the thesis. In green, our summary sentence links back to both supporting paragraphs and the outline sentence in the introduction. And finally in red, our restatement of thesis brings the essay to a close by reinforcing the argument made in the thesis at the beginning of the essay. Thus it is easy to see how the sentences in the entire essay work together as a team and cause the essay to operate as one large, cohesive unit.
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types of essay questions are difficult to fit into the argument essay format and thus must be
to write, we need to only look at the instruction words as these words tell us what to do.
As you recall from 3.1, the instruction words here are asking us to choose a side agree or disagree. question: Technology is becoming increasingly prevalent in the world today. will completely replace the teacher in the classroom. Here, the instruction words have changed. Given time, technology Thus the question is making it very clear that it wants to see our opinion and because Now take a look at this of this there is only one essay style we can use: an argument essay.
both sides of the statement and this is difficult to do using an argument essay format. want to see you opinion? Or is it asking for a discussion on a topic?
important to look closely at what the essay question is asking for in its instruction words. instruction words asking you to write a discussion essay, please review 1.4.
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Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph ! ! ! ! Sentence 1 - Topic sentence Sentence 2 - Example Sentence 3 - Discussion Sentence 4 - Conclusion
Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph ! Sentence 1 Statement of first point of view ! Sentence 2 Example supporting this point of view ! ! Sentence 3 - Discussion Sentence 4 - Conclusion
Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph ! ! ! ! Sentence 1 - Topic sentence Sentence 2 - Example Sentence 3 - Discussion Sentence 4 - Conclusion
Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph ! Sentence 1 Statement of second point of view ! Sentence 2 Example supporting this point of view ! ! Sentence 3 - Discussion Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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As you can see, both essays have the same number of sentences, 15. the essays are also similar or exactly the same. important sentence is the essay. noticed is that the discussion essay lacks a thesis!
However one major difference that you may have As you learned in 1.3, a thesis is the most
To answer this we must look at what the essays purpose is. state an opinion and prove it.
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opinion is stated right at the beginning in the thesis sentence, however when we write a discussion essay our opinion is stated at the end in our statement of position sentence. argument essay and a discussion essay mirror each other. Lets look again at this essay question: Technology is becoming increasingly prevalent in the world today. will completely replace the teacher in the classroom. Given time, technology
Analyzing both sides of this argument challenges us to come up with reasons that both support and refute it. Please read this suggested response: Even in classrooms technology Both sides of this argument
The argument that technology will completely replace the teacher in the
classroom is a subject that is both supported and refuted by many. will be analyzed before a reasoned conclusion is drawn.
Firstly it is easy to see the progressive rate at which technology is able to mimic both the physical and mental abilities of human beings. For example, the Honda robot Asimov can today Therefore the possibility of Because of this it is move its body and manipulate objects with human-like precision.
robotic teachers in the future truly becomes a plausible outcome given time. garnered support.
easy to see why the argument that technology could replace human teachers in the classroom has However on the other side of this argument it must be remembered that a teacher powered by artificial intelligence would have little to no control over its students. indeed completing their class work and not fooling around during class time. For example, it is Unfortunately this commonly understood that children require the watchful eye of a teacher to ensure that they are is something that a robotic teacher simply cannot provide. Thus this makes it clear why the argument that technology will never completely replace the teacher in the classroom could also be plausible. In summary, both sides of the argument regarding the possibility of a technologically driven classroom have strong support. However after analyzing both camps it is clear that the idea of As such, it is predicted that the having a class run entirely by a machine cannot be supported.
negative aspects of the debate over computerized teaching will forever be stronger than the positive ones and because of this computers will never replace teachers. As you can see, many areas remain quite similar to our original argument essay. opinions of others. However in this
essay we have been careful not to share our opinion on this topic until after we have analyzed the
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________________________________________________________________ Name one way argument essays and discussion essays are different. ________________________________________________________________ What is cohesion? ________________________________________________________________ Fill in the missing information in this argument essay outline: Paragraph 1 - Introduction ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! Sentence 1 - _________________________ Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement Sentence 3 - _________________________ Sentence 4 - Outline sentence Sentence 1 - Topic sentence Sentence 2 - _________________________ Sentence 3 - _________________________ Sentence 4 - Conclusion Sentence 1 - Topic sentence Sentence 2 - _________________________ Sentence 3 - _________________________ Sentence 4 - Conclusion Sentence 1 - _________________________ Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis Sentence 3 - _________________________
Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
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Write 3 examples of cohesive phrases that you could use to show a contrast: ______________________ ______________________ ______________________ Write a thesis for this essay question: New York City is a huge metropolitan area and as with most huge cities has a number of means of public transportation. New York. A metro system is the most effective way to get around large cities like Support this statement.
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essay question and presents the writer's opinion or argument. Name one way argument essays and discussion essays are different. Argument essays present the writers opinion in the introduction paragraph (via the thesis). Discussion essays present the writers opinion in the conclusion paragraph (via the statement of position sentence). or Argument essays state and prove an argument while discussion essays analyze the opinions of others. What is cohesion? Cohesion is the process of writing with fluent, linking ideas. Fill in the missing information in this argument essay outline: Paragraph 1 - Introduction ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! Sentence 1 Background statement Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement Sentence 3 - Thesis Sentence 4 - Outline sentence Sentence 1 - Topic sentence Sentence 2 - Example Sentence 3 - Discussion Sentence 4 - Conclusion Sentence 1 - Topic sentence Sentence 2 - Example Sentence 3 - Discussion Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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Paragraph 4 - Conclusion ! ! ! Sentence 1 - Summary Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis Sentence 3 Prediction or recommendation
Write 3 examples of cohesive phrases that you could use to show a contrast: on the other hand however conversely Write a thesis for this essay question: New York City is a huge metropolitan area and as with most huge cities has a number of means of public transportation. New York. A metro system is the most effective way to get around large cities like Support this statement.
A metro system is by far the most effective way to get around large cities like New York. or A metro system is not the most effective way to get around large cities like New York. or A metro system is not as effective as a bus system to get around large cities like New York. (Of course, here you can substitute any system where bus system is written.)
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