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    Alejandra Martinez

    ENGL 1301-101

    Dr. Sharity Nelson

    16 September 2022

    Essay 1 Instructor Feedback

    Well designed experiment and solid paper presenting it. As you revise this paper for the Portfolio

    due at the end of the semester, keep these suggestions in mind: the Introduction can be

    streamlined for improved readability (several statements need citations for the summarized ideas

    or clearer connections to the sentences that contain cited research); the Methods section needs to

    clarify why gym visits are relevant to the experiment, same for Results; and the Discussion

    section could be more rigorous in its paragraphing (breaking up the discussion with clearer topic

    sentences, etc.), and the citations for the quotations must have page numbers. The Lavie source is

    misspelled in the citation, which makes it difficult to match to the correct reference.

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