Talk:Yusef Khan/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Mayhem Mario 18:01, 5 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Right here I go, on the request from the nomiantor GSorby to review this article.

Refs

Ref No.10 is a dead link so 1) should be tagged, and two can be archived as it is a Holy Soap ref.
Duplicate ref Kilkelly, Daniel. "More 'EastEnders' chat from Nina Wadia". Digital Spy. http://www.digitalspy.co.uk/soaps/s2/eastenders/scoop/a312016/more-eastenders-chat-from-nina-wadia.html. Retrieved 4 July 2011.

Notes

The lead is very messy. I think the lead should contain no refs. This lead contains 3 refs. I think the lead should summarize the article up and what the character is about, so delete:

Bhatti has praised the cast for being so welcoming to him. Speaking to Inside Soap, he explained that he is "thrilled" to be a part of the regular EastEnders cast. "They're so welcoming. There's a lot of joking about. I'm having a great time at EastEnders - it's a real privilege to be here," he said.[2] Bhatti was recommended by the actress Nina Wadia, who plays the already extablished character Zainab Masood. In an interview with Digital Spy, Wadia commented: "I'd actually gone up and spoken to Bryan about Ace Bhatti, who plays Yusef, because I thought that he definitely had the quality that Yusef would need - which is a very ambiguous but charming quality!".[3]

All should be deleted and especially Bhatti was recommended by the actress Nina Wadia, who plays the already extablished character Zainab Masood. can be merged in with the first paragraph- i'll let you work on that.

I know this is quite obvious but there's no source for Yusef married again and had one child, Afia Khan (Meryl Fernandes) and also moved to the United Kingdom.

This needs re-wording, Tamwar feels he is probably not good enough for Afia in Yusef's eyes as he is from a poor background, but Yusef says that does not matter and approves of Tamwar as he likes Afia enough to say it to her father's face. Actually looking at the storylines it needs a lot of cancelling down, just look at Ian Beale, 25 years and his storylines have been cancelled down that much, those storylines need a lot of cancelling down!

I really dont get the article, you've put Bhatti was already known to EastEnders executive producer Bryan Kirkwood when he auditioned for the part, as Kirkwood and Bhatti worked on Coronation Street at the same time. Bhatti was the only actor who auditioned for the part of Yusef.[1] Then further down,Bhatti was already known to EastEnders executive producer Bryan Kirkwood when he auditioned for the part, as Kirkwood and Bhatti worked on Coronation Street at the same time. Bhatti was the only actor to audition for the part.[1] Hm... looks the same! You really need to sort out the lead, sorry to go back on to talk about it.
In an interview with Inside Soap (needs italicing), Khan admits that he is sympathetic for his character (the article is about Yusef-duhh....), Yusef.
Bhatti was surprised to hear that Yusef is liked mainly by women, but in an interview with Mirror.co.uk, he admits that he is nothing like Yusef in real life. He owns only one smart suit, prefers jeans and has two children, and he was so poor at drama school, he had to clean toilets just to get by. “Maybe women love the character, but if they get to know me they find I’m not smooth, I’m not sophisticated and I don’t drive flash cars. I prefer trainers and jeans to smart suits.”[21] Not needed, maybe, ''Bhatti was surprised to hear that Yusef is liked mainly by women, but in an interview with Mirror.co.uk, he admits that he is nothing like Yusef in real life. That's all.
Im sure, Bhatti has has admitted that he is surprised by his status as a heartthrob. "It's a great compliment, but a complete surprise," he told the Sunday Mirror. "Maybe women love the character, but if they get to know me they find I'm not smooth, I'm not sophisticated and I don't drive flash cars. I prefer trainers and jeans to smart suits."[19] is near enought the same as Bhatti was surprised to hear that Yusef is liked mainly by women, but in an interview with Mirror.co.uk, he admits that he is nothing like Yusef in real life. He owns only one smart suit, prefers jeans and has two children, and he was so poor at drama school, he had to clean toilets just to get by. “Maybe women love the character, but if they get to know me they find I’m not smooth, I’m not sophisticated and I don’t drive flash cars. I prefer trainers and jeans to smart suits.”[21]
I mentioned this earlier, but not in detail, Bhatti has praised the cast for being so welcoming to him. Speaking to Inside Soap, he explained that he is "thrilled" to be a part of the regular EastEnders cast. "They're so welcoming. There's a lot of joking about. I'm having a great time at EastEnders - it's a real privilege to be here," he said.[2] Not needed. Just say if anything, Speaking to Inside Soap, he explained that he is "thrilled" to be a part of the regular EastEnders cast.
~~Instead of using the whole quotes for a ref, just summarize it.~~

Minor Deatils

"Fans call me Dr Evil." [17] not neeeded, in reception
Tariq is not linked.
'the scenes aired on the 2 June 2011'
Nina Wadia and Zainab Masood are linked 5 times in this article.
Linking problems with Digital Spy to (linked 3 times),
Masood Ahmed and Nitin Ganatra linked 3 times, overlinking!
There are a lot of DS sources with no publisher info in them.
'Mirror.co.uk' chanegd to Daily Mirror?
Whilst editing it I noticed that for a few sources it is written as |publisher=Digital Spy which is wrong, should be work=Digital Spy, sort it out for a few of them.
Delete Tamwar Masood form 'Other Relatives' as not related by blood. (i think)
Caption for image?

Review

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose): (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
Prose needs a lot of work, see above.
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (references): (citations to reliable sources): (OR):
See above.
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): (focused):
:)
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
:)
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
:)
It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Comments above
Overall:
Pass/Fail

For this article I would fail it though if I see you can make the improvements, it would be great. Thats why I put it on hold, but I think you put the article up for GA to premature as you can see all the highlighted things above. Needs work- on hold for 7 days. Mayhem Mario 18:01, 5 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Um, editors are granted seven days to complete tasks. Though some reviewers will hold the review open for longer. - JuneGloom Talk 18:28, 5 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Sorry! It was a typo! One of many.... Mayhem Mario 18:59, 5 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Mario, I don't feel you should be reviewing this considering you made edits to the list entry before it was split off. Therefore parts of this article are attributed to you. –anemone projectors– 10:09, 6 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Okay I've finished with the fixes. What about now? ..George Sorby • Talk • Contribs .. 14:29, 6 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Look, I shouldnt be reviweing this, as i have contributed to this article in the list. I think im going to fail it, then you can nominate it again, so someone outside Wp:EE can review it. I hope that when it is reviewed again it will pass. Mayhem Mario 14:56, 6 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]