Lauren Frans Review On Fragko 2

Lauren Frans review on Fragko
Unit 3 Peer Review Workshop: Content
1- Does the author present a thesis statement about the rhetorical

effectiveness of a peer-reviewed article? Is this thesis clear and direct? What
is it? Mark it in the text. What suggestions do you have for the writer in order
to strengthen the thesis? Has the author chosen one (and only one) peer-
reviewed article to analyze?
The thesis statement is clear: it focuses on analyzing the rhetorical
effectiveness of a peer-reviewed article about climate change's impact on
marine biodiversity. To strengthen it, you could provide a more specific
outline of the rhetorical strategies they'll analyze. Yes, there is a chosen
peer-reviewed article to analyze.
2- Does the essay include a controlling idea that is not obvious to everyone?
In other words, does it reveal something not everyone would know about how
and why this peer-reviewed article is used? Where can the author develop
more of an analysis or more fully develop the ideas?
Yes, the essay explores how scholarly articles use rhetorical strategies to
persuade readers on complex issues like climate change. To develop this
idea further, you could go deeper into specific examples of rhetorical
strategies used by Jones and Cheung.
3- Does the author use elements from the article to support the thesis made
about it? What are they? Mark them in the text. Are they used as good
evidence? Indicate why or why not in the text. What kind of evidence would
help the writer demonstrate his/her point?
The author effectively uses elements from the article to support the thesis,
such as ethos, pathos, logos, and language. Including specific examples or
quotes from the article could further strengthen the analysis.
4- Does the essay maintain a cohesive focus around the thesis? Does the
author use solid transitions to guide his/her ideas? Determine, as a reader,
how you want to be presented with the information. Does the organization
work for you? Indicate suggestions for organization and transitions. Also,
mark any tangents that you find in the essay.
The essay maintains focus and uses solid transitions. Some tangents could
be streamlined to stay aligned with the main argument, like the discussion of
the study's methodology.
5- Where could the author use more detail to further illustrate his/her claim?
Indicate these places in the text.
More detail could be added in several places to further illustrate claims, such
as providing specific examples of emotional appeals or language choices
from the article.
6- Are the introduction and conclusion focused on the main point of the
essay? Does the conclusion answer the three questions? (1. Did I do what I
said I would do? 2. Why is this important? 3. What do I want my audience to
do with this information?)
The introduction and conclusion are focused on the essay's main point,
which is analyzing the effectiveness of the peer-reviewed article. The
conclusion does a good job of summarizing the main points and answering
the three questions, particularly in emphasizing the importance of effective
communication in addressing environmental issues.
7- Indicate in the text the author's strengths and weaknesses.

Strengths are there is a clear thesis statement and cohesive organization.
Weaknesses would be the need for more specific examples from the article
and occasional tangents.
8- What three revision suggestions do you have for the writer?

Three revision suggestions are: include more specific examples from the
article, streamline discussions to avoid tangents, and clarify the significance
of discussed rhetorical strategies.
9- Indicate in the text where the author needs more details.

In the section pathos, you could benefit from providing specific examples or
quotes from the peer-reviewed article to illustrate how Jones and Cheung
evoke empathy and concern in readers.
10- Indicate in the text where the author needs more evidence.
In the paragraph about logos, you can also include more specific examples or
quotes
11- Indicate in the text three places where the author deserves praise for this essay.
Praise for the clear thesis statement, cohesive organization, and insightful commentary on
rhetorical strategies used in the article.
Unit 3 Peer Review:
1. How is the essay organized? Does each paragraph contain one and only one main idea that
connects to the thesis? Does this organization help move the ideas forward? Tell the author if the
organization works or offer organization ideas.
The essay is organized into distinct sections, each focusing on different rhetorical strategies used
in the peer-reviewed article. Each paragraph seems to contain one main idea that connects to the
thesis. This organization generally helps move the ideas forward, but there are some areas where
the connection to the thesis could be strengthened. For example, some paragraphs could better tie
back to the overall argument or thesis statement.
2. Where could the author use stronger transitions to strengthen connections between his/her
points?
Stronger transitions could be used to strengthen connections between points, particularly when
moving between different rhetorical strategies discussed in the essay. Clear transition sentences
at the beginning or end of paragraphs could help guide the reader through the analysis more
smoothly.
3. Does the author have any fragments, comma splices, or run-ons? If so, mark them in the text.
If you know the rule, then go ahead an offer advice to the author. If you do not know the rule,
then simply mention that something seems off.
There don't appear to be any fragments, comma splices, or run-ons in the text.
4. Where could the author use more detail to further illustrate his/her claim? Indicate these places
in the text.
More detail could be added to further illustrate claims in several places, such as providing
specific examples or quotes from the peer-reviewed article to support the analysis of rhetorical
strategies.
5. Are the style and tone of the essay appropriate for the audience?
Yes
6. Are the sentences and word choices varied? Does the author use strong, active verbs and solid,
descriptive nouns? Indicate where the author could strengthen the verbs and nouns.
The sentences and word choices vary to some extent, but the author could strengthen them
further by using stronger, active verbs and descriptive nouns throughout the essay.
7. Is the author too repetitive or present too much information? In other words, does the essay
overwhelm you as a reader because there is too much information or underwhelm you because
there is too little information?
The essay does not seem overly repetitive or lacking in information.
8. Is the essay confusing because information has been omitted and/or too much information is
assumed to be known by the readers?
The essay is generally clear, but some sections could benefit from additional clarification or
explanation, particularly when discussing complex concepts or rhetorical strategies.
9. Is the essay in the correct MLA format?
yes
10. Indicate in the text the author’s strengths and weaknesses.
Strengths of the author include a clear thesis statement, cohesive organization, and insightful
analysis of rhetorical strategies. Weaknesses include the need for stronger connections between
paragraphs and more detailed evidence to support claims.
11. What are two or three revision suggestions you have for the writer?
You can just strengthen transitions and add more examples/evidence.

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Unit 3 Peer Review Workshop: Content

1- Does the author present a thesis statement about the rhetorical

7- Indicate in the text the author's strengths and weaknesses.

8- What three revision suggestions do you have for the writer?

9- Indicate in the text where the author needs more details.

Unit 3 Peer Review:

The essay does not seem overly repetitive or lacking in information.

9. Is the essay in the correct MLA format?

10. Indicate in the text the author’s strengths and weaknesses.

You can just strengthen transitions and add more examples/evidence.

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