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    The table illustrates the changes in five different means of transport which were registered

    in Australia in 2010,2012 and 2014. Overall, the number of all vehicles witnessed an upward
    trend over the period surveyed while motorcycles rose at the fastest rate.

    In terms of the two most prominent types of vehicles, the overall leader were was passenger
    vehicles that accounted for 11.8 million in 2010 and it then increased by 10.2% to 13 million
    in 2014. Next was commercial vehicles with 2.3 million in 2010 and the figure subsequently
    saw a rise of 17.4% to 2.7 million in the final year.

    Turning to the remaining modes of travel, there were 540 thousand motorcycles in 2010 and
    the number then soared to 709 thousand in 2014, a surge of 30.8%. Another considerable
    increase was seen in light trucks, the least popular, that increased by 23.5% from 106
    thousand in 2010 to 131 thousand in 2014.Heavy trucks with a rise of 8.3% started at 384
    thousand in the first year and reached 416 thousand in 2014.

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    Task 8 150 -190 words
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    ment

    overall summary

    all key data covered / data is highlighted well

    data is reported accurately

    Cohesion 8 logical separation of data into paragraphs


    and
    Coherence

    body paragraphs start with a phrase that indicates the data in the paragraph

    logical paragraph development

    Good overall layout

    Vocabulary 7-8 ✘
    appropriate word choices / control of word endings/forms

    spelling is correct

    Grammar 8 articles (a, an, the)

    sentence structures are correct

    punctuation

    Overall 7.5-8 A very good report; however, the obvious issue that stands out is the repetition.
    You did a very good job of adding variation but the use of the phrase ‘in 2014’ is
    something that needs to be addressed. It really will hang in the balance as to
    whether you get penalised for it or not.
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